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The Broken Locks Were A Warning

It's quite hazy in my thoughts right now;
Being it eight in the morning



At your dormitory window looking out
To the pavement, street-fight, urban decay
Of this city, this state of mind
The silver lining of time
You are
The future


You know I'm not the kind to pester
But maybe my persistence
Will finally show you I need you

Caffeine, cocaine, dopamine
Night-shift mind for a nightmare world
Bloodshot eyes, maybe from being up since 5 last night
Maybe from crying at the sight of your new life
If I need to,
I'll take a knife to whomever tries to stop me.


I feel like I don't belong here,
But here I stand nonetheless.
I don't break promises to the men I'm in love with


Time went floating by you
The single candle in the night
With your flame doused, how do I find you?

Working the way up
Biting my lip, hoping for dumb luck
To bring us together
Like that winter,
Remember?
You were so warm...

I'm sorry I left out detail.
And, as I thought, you still fail to see
The hell I went through just to see
You,
The future.

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  • Roseamongweeds
    October 30

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    Bautifully written, nice poem I don't understand the link to the word please (If I'm just missing it, I'm so sorry you can message me to explain if you'd like!)


  • innocence jaded.xx
    October 5, 2008

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    Wow. Incredibly written. I love how you wrote this with such raw emotions & powerful imagery. It reminded me of a story, in some ways. Wonderful take on the prompt. Thanks for entering & good luck ! ♥


  • shecantstopfalling.
    September 27, 2008

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    wow, this is such a great write!

    Caffeine, cocaine, dopamine
    Night-shift mind for a nightmare world
    Bloodshot eyes, maybe from being up since 5 last night
    Maybe from crying at the sight of your new life
    If I need to,
    I'll take a knife to whomever tries to stop me.

    That part was my favourite! This is just brilliant!


  • trinajean
    September 25, 2008
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    nice take on the prompt.

    emotion in this was raw and well done.


  • innocence jaded.xx
    September 16, 2008
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    Hey dearest is it possible you could choose a diff number ? 8 is already taken

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