Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read Contests Groups Learn Forums Store Help
 

polly



 

polly plucks off

her scarlet handkerchief

when august nights

 

bloom moonlight

and daylight beats longer

than its predecessor.

 

its veins dry up

and shifts from

a confused orange

 

to a mellow yellow

while the skin shrivel up

into a sober ginger.

 

she's lonely

when the wind howls

and snakes its fingers

through her hair.

 

then polly closes her eyes

and haikus will sprout

in watercolors.

 

she tastes snowflakes

on tiled rooftops

while the chimney's smoke

 

dances barefoot in puddles,

and she's somewhere upstairs 

looking out the window  

scrying icicles in stills.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: The Red Kerchief:

http://sarachmet.deviantart.com/art/The-Red-Kerchief-97661692

This poem has been through a major overhaul since I've posted. The whole theme of the poem has changed. The first one didn't work in my opinion. I'm finally satisfied with it (for the moment at least lol).

- Aly

In a list

A contest entry

Constructive Criticism

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 8 of 8

  • transcendental baby gold member
    October 10, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    Congrats!!!! Knew this was a winner


  • LadyDementia gold member
    September 29, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Magical write, some unique and beautiful imagery within your words. Excellent read. Thank you for the entry and good luck


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 23, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    This is wonderfully creative and unique! You've used some fab imagery in there that really paints the picture, I was enchanted!!

    Thank you for the entry!


  • transcendental baby gold member
    September 17, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    I love this .. the move through moods and seasons! Scrying? Is that a new word? I love new words!


    • barefoot contessa silver member
      September 17, 2008
      Edit | Reply
      Scrying isn't a new word. It's a divination using a crystal, mirrors, bowls of water, ink, or flames to see images or gain information about a specific place, person, or things. I learned about this word when I researching information about Wicca.

      - Aly


  • Nephlim
    September 16, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    I don't believe you can write three awesome poems in one day share the muse, Hamronie, don't be shell fish! . Once again, great ending, and I think you put just the right amount of the darker meaning in it , even though I dunno entirely what it means . I just know that it read well and I like the words!

    GREAT job
    diggin it majorly


    • barefoot contessa silver member
      September 16, 2008
      Edit | Reply
      I edited it since you read it. My muse been staring at pretty pictures on contest pages. lol
      - Aly

1 - 8 of 8