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Like A Tree In The Forest Of Need.

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When your looking for love you won't find it.
Like a tree in the forest of need,
And your mind to look back in your wanting,
As the pain in your heart, makes you bleed.

If your heart it once bitten, by true love?
And this true love not all it did seem,
Then real love you can never have felt it,
So then how can you know what it means?

And the people that try to begin it,
All of those who to wish your hearts light,
And to try through your pain, they to win it?
Yet no love can you give in your night.

You to reach to the stars and to question?
But their light it does fade, your eyes seen,
Yet the heart of the person who loves you,
You are ever to him so serene.

Through your life you will never now trust love,
For the pain in you, too much to bare!
And the true heart that here now awaits you,
You can never then see, or to care,

When your looking for love you won't find it.
Like a tree in the forest of need,
And your mind to look back in your wanting,
As the pain in your heart, makes you bleed.

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I tried to write it as a melody, a song, just need the music now.

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  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 1, 2008
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    nicely written and congratulations on your bronze.
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  • Myjoy gold member
    September 17, 2008

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    It is not just the heart that bleeds, it is the soul, and body as well. Trust is givin with time, understanding, love, and growth. Without these things for the one bitten, not once, not twice, but more then the heart cares to remember. Of course there will be tests, of course there will be question....for the heart has felt, then was broken....it takes years to fix the broken, a very wonderful, amazing man or woman to glue the heart to beat. Wonderful flow, great rhythm. Beautiful words.


  • hotchocolate gold member
    September 16, 2008
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    I like this one. Has a true meaning!

    You to reach to the stars and to question?
    That their light it does fade, your eyes seen,
    Yet the heart of the person who loves you,
    You are ever to him so serene.

    Through your life you will never now trust him,
    For the pain in you, too much to bare!
    And the true heart that here now awaits you,
    You can never then see, or to care.