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{1) Verse chords are Gmaj, Dmin, Amin W-4/4 beat}
He walked on top of centipedes
With truth in heart his right eye bleeds
Though in a time of much turmoil
He would preach the poem, and churn the soil
My father was him this awkward man
He died a liar with pen in hand
I speak the truth, these words shall grow
Upon your minds, I watch this show
Send me back to distant times
I'm sick of doubt, and unheard chimes
Let me hear the Jackals cry
My thoughts would weep
my spirit fly.
{Chorus has same chords as verse Gmaj, Dmin, Amin W-4/4 beat.}
As time crushes
everything
between its gears,
Yes, time easily
will brush aside
all the years.
{Bridge, tempo slowed and tweaked a bit. Chords are Cmaj, and Emin.}
What I lack
the faith inside
starts to unwind
like a spool
from the pool
God's tool
You think you're cool like a poodle?
walking upright,
but you're so uptight, you're so uptight
Your money
is what keeps you,
so right.
{2nd) Verse
Feel it,
so quick like a light bulb
On the top of my skull
A comic book, a tainted look
wide-spread, and all beneath
The freeway sends us back and forth
Like my lover and intercourse
It's a sick twisted vine
A dirty clothesline.
{2nd) Chorus
Because time crushes
everything
between its gears,
Yes, time easily
will brush aside
all the years.
{Bridge}
Lay underneath
the siege took place beneath
while you slept
in the cot, in the cot
That your parents
bought back
for you
Christmas always
turns you
so damn blue, so damn blue.
{3) Chorus
As time crushes
everything
between its gears,
Yes, time easily
will brush aside
all the years.
{3) Verse chords are Gmaj, Dmin, Amin W-4/4 beat, take off into freestyle.}
{Pull out your bigg muff pedal and push repeatedly.}
If Jimson weed is the
thing you need
grind it up, grind it up
When your mother is half
at her best. Scribe her name,
against your chest.
Ask the flower for the power
Steep the tea sacred hour
You've got your smoke
You've got your chalk symbols
saving you.
One wolf hair...eye of toad...bat wing
headstone green
Walking through the cemetary....
Overcast was the climate
Uncolored was the day..
She is leaning on that mark of faith,
but she doesn't want to talk
Am I in the ground?
invisible, invisible.
Wash myself
all for you.
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Written January 21st, 2004
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I now see why you think the way you do. I can't say i like it , but it is well written. Too dark for my tastes but your structure is solid.
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nice
the words are enchanting ... wonderfully woven together ... the poodle thing i agree with what the other commenters said - glaringly outta place in this piece. this is an interesting, mysterious piece ... thanx for sharing this. -
your doing great for we all have our own unique style . i will check back on some more of your tunes soon
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nice one
wow this is a good set of lyriks.
--Blessed be--
Bradhadair -
This is wicked. Random, but awesome. Well done.
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deserving of publication
I like that you write for your own individuality. No one else writes like this, and that is what I feel makes a true poet. I myself am not quite there yet, but I don't really write for anyone but me anyways. I am not going to try and understand what I don't understand about your writing, and just accept it at face value. I do know that you are very well structured as a poet, and there is definitely a good rythm in just reading you work. I didn't listen to the musical version, but I can imagine that it fits well. I really like your work. -
Apparently, an education.
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Five bucks? what's dat in english!?
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Very compelling and magnetic, keeps moving. Very amazing piece, almost spellbinding. Very creative word combinations. Well done.
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I liked this poem. It made me laugh a great deal. I'm sorry but it just seemed more like humor than anything.
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I listened and read at the same time - I don't know if you realise this but the words being sung are not exactly the same as the words written down - it might be worth taking a look and doing a bit of editing to the text?
Also the words being sung, for me, did not fit the way they are written on the page, the line breaks are not in the same places. If some people are just reading without listening they will get a very different flow from those who are listening - which one do you want?
The backing vocals are enchanting, I really enjoyed them and the music is fantastic, but the solid, masculine lead voice is not what I expected after that ethereal intro and initially was hard to slot in - but after a few lines I got to quite like it.
The words themselves are magical, they have a dream-like quality which I really enjoyed. Except for the poodle thing - that was a bit rubbish.
Overall, I'm very glad I stopped by.
LB
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This was outstanding
The only line that kinda pulled away was "you think you're cool like a poodle" i got the meaning...but i dont think it worked..maybe it is just me...the rest was really incredible...great lyrics!
Fern
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this is really well written. it's unique and i like the music that accompanies it. the title is really original too. amazing job, keep up the good work. <3
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I wasn't quite sure of the meaning of some of the lines in your verses, but then again, that could be said for many songs and many poems. I thought that you might have chosen some lines/words in order to get the rhyme. I definitely sensed the talent, and I might just be bad at analyzing lyrics/poems. I did like it though, and it sounds great.
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I apologize that I had hit this last time you put it on a campaign. It had been long enough that I forgot. It was well worht the listen last time and i am going to listen to it again. If I were not between jobs right now I would make the purchase. I mentioned last time that I had been looking for something to really listen to and the radio just doesn't cut it. You're doing a great job with your tunesmithing. RC
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Great listen! I have been starving for something decent to tickle my fancy and this was it. I am looking forward to more. RC
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Amazing, just really freaking amazing. It's great.
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you are a true poet
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The thing I always like about the way you write is the way in a very serious way you can come out with a very odd, yet fitting method of word play. Someday, when I have a computer that does something other than...well, barely function, I will listen, possibly to more than one. In actuality I will most likely end up buying a CD, because I have, afterall liked your work for sometime.
"When your mother is half
at her best. Scribe her name,
against your chest."
That is one of those lines that sticks with a person, or maybe just me.
Thanks for sharing.
-Star -
Interesting title to this song - well written lyrics and lovely picture you use to promote this piece - good luck.
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We are not in the country boys.
I must say this is not your June Carter and Johnny Cash song but then they were unique as is this song. Interesting to read. -
Eerie & Dark
Wonderful piece, especially set to the music you provided. Good lyrics, though heaven only knows I'm no judge of music Also liked the background singers and the chorus. Gave it that eerie otherworld quality like fantasy and reality (of your voice) mingling together superbly. Thank you!!!
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Good stuff. Strong lyric lines and a good rhythm.
Nice flow No time to listen right now. I'll try to find time later. This is definitely unique. -
Breath-taking
I cannot begin to descirbe the feelings that fell over me when I read this. It is so moving and ....so full of passion. It is so dark ... I just love it. This is amazing. Keep it up, man! -
What type of song
sings with winds along
or cries so forlorn
using reeds for horns.
The rustling trees seem
like cricket played tamborines
and as darkness falls
the owl chorus calls.
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Nice job!
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I had bookmarked this, and clicked on it not knowing that it was a featured poem. I guess I'll have to give you an applaud to return some of the points.
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not bad
No time to listen right now, but I bookmarked it. I'll try to find time later. This is definitely unique, at least the words seem to be (or should I have said definitively?).
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that is really good.... I might just have to buy the album... how much is shipping and handling... and do you have other songs on here?
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awesome!!!
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OMG this is amazing...you have real talent, I assume you are in a band, well I expect to hear on the radio soon with lyrics like these. You and your band would be my new worship (I love Tool and mean no disrespect in case JMK is reading) but you blow them out of the water. I didnt get to hear the music, I was to lazy to dowload it (dont hold that againest me) but I appreciate bands for lyrics more then for music anyways. And I think that if you are in the right place at the right time you will go very very far. I wish you so much luck, and good juju. I hope that if this is something that you seriously want to do that you go far in it. I would buy your stuff.
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Good stuff. Strong lyric lines and a good rhythm. My only complaint might be that the rhymes are a bit forced in some places. But that would be it. Not bad. Not bad at all.
Cheers,
Yossarian -
Oh cool, you liked the song?
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You are one of a kind...that is for sure! I enjoyed this, and the tune...I can't wait to let my husband hear it. He is gonna flip!
Peace, Kelly -
very interesting. Thank you for entering!
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I will not be so arrogent as to deconstruct this work...just let me say...this is fan-fucken-tastic!
Cheers!
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whoa
this is about 80% better than most of the music out there now!! i don't know exactly how it would sound, but the chord progression gave me a good idea.. great work. you guys must be awesome.. now i want your cd.
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excellent
I really enjoyed this. I think its well written. Very creatively expressed. Keep up the good work and good luck. -
This is wonderful I wish I knew how to read cords so I could play it on my keyboard. This is a good christian song I hope you get it published and I hope I hear it on the radio. GOD BLESS AND TAKE CARE LAURA
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well crap on not being able to download thanks to the networking here. oh well. twisted lyrics, there. like the chorus, though... simple, clear. grr i wanna hear it. damn ICARUS. anyway. again, impressed by the work. and just because i thought it was funny... "you think you're cool like a poodle?" heh. yeah. go poodles. ok i'm done with my meaningless rants here. i'll see about downloading at home or something. where i won't get thrown to student court. ugh.
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Bravo!
I went over and listened to this and I was mightily impressed. I won't bore you by comparing you to Cohen, Reed, or anyone else because everyone deserves to be unique. And it was very haunting.
It was cool, too, to be able to skip back and read the words, which are ardent and spirited. I like your style and I admire anyone who can go out there and do it.
I wish you orange pippins and pipestrelles and a
to bring your joy. Best ~ crisstiena
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is this the song on your site?
*whispers* i d/led it...
most wonderfulest song i've EVER heard...it gives me shivers and goosebumps all at the same time...
i.
love.
it.
Nyx...
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Okay Homer....now I know how the bridge sounds. Soft 'ha!" - works so lovely.
My only complaint is that you really REALLY need more bandwidth on the MP3 site....but, what else is new, eh? -
I swear you have the most original train of thought in the whole world and as usual i'm in shock of how much i love your work...your just sooo different in every poem and song and everything you do...has this certain quailty too it....and it jsut reaks of talent. Great just a great write as always...great job choder....i really loved it.
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excellent
tremendous in its enthusiasm and gusto.nice and feisty and i have no idea of how the music would sound except i know it would be great coming from you. i loved the last two sexy little lines nice contrast to the rest..and a nice picture of you with a flannel a blue one with all black felt tip pen writng over it
and writing over your bottom well all over your body really seeing as how you are a walking poem legend really....remeber it pays to advertise....will you do me a drawing of you with all things written on....and drawn on...what a pity i am not a gold member and how nice for yuo being a gold member...theres a joke there somewhere but i am too ladylike to say anything....otherwise if i was a gold member i could have got you back for writing my name on the toilet that time. i could have uploaded an image of you with a toilet drawn on your forhead and loads of women sat in your mouth and nice pink teeth with eyes in...and ...and ... and... -
I'm baaaaaaaaaaaaack. I checked out the CDBABY site, then onward to "Emotionally Unavailable" and listened to the REAL music for this piece. T'was a bit different than I had imagined and mouthed - hadn't really expected a sixties acid wave trip, but it works with the layered voices (which, admittedly are a bit hard to type). Came across a bit softer than I expected, but none the less powerful for the transformation.....but I still don't know how the bloody bridge sounds....
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i guess when i get home from class ill have to play this one so i can hear the music behind the words
this was on your site right
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This has an awesome feel to it. The flow upon the alternative nature of the lyrics. Good job with this, I'm gonna come back and read more of your stuff at some point.
WiLL -
I Bleed
I sensed the ghost of Morrison in this piece -- not strongly, but hovering around the edges, all blurry and gone soft. But that's what he gets for ducking out of the party early - you only got so much fuel for the fire to burn, so you have to keep from combusting too soon or too fast.
The opening verse catches and grinds my eye into worm food - I think I felt a brain cell pop. This is the view of the Shaman we prayed for in the bitter cold of night and you've brought him forth from whence he'd gone.
And the chorus, Horus, is catchy and has cadence.
The 'ha!' in the bridge kinda jars me a bit, but what the 'ell do I know about song writing, so maybe it's important to the telling - the rest of it is, in my humble opinon - as fine a bridge as I've ever driven.
Looks good. Sounds good too - but I had to make up the music in my head and roll it out with my tongue, so it probably sounds different than yours.
Heavy thoughts, powerful images and kung-fu verses (not to mention the suspension bridge) -- let's cue it up and see if they bleed.
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