Birth was my greatest thrill
leaving my spirit home for earth
living in that warm cocoon
waiting for my birth
Years of lessons followed me
Tears were shed and dried
Although I spent time laughing
it was more often that I cried
I like the way I handled things
I like how far I've come
From so much hurt and anger
when I was very young
I learned about compassion
as I watched my life unfold
I learned to control reaction
when shut out in the cold
I found I had a loving heart
one that I could use
to help so many others
on their journey through abuse
I love my heightened senses
that feel and know the truth
I love the way they help me
so I put them to good use
I've lived this life for many years
seen so much along the way
Held others close and protected them
and I still do that today
Yes I like myself much better
now I don't take on attack
There is no-one I trust better
than myself watching my back
Author notes
We should all look at what we have, what we are and how we fit into society. It is a good exercise in realising just how much we actually do have for a change, instead of always putting ourselves down.
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Your words are strong and proud. Very well crafted. Your message in your Author's notes is full of wisdom as well. It good when you like yourself, because you spend a lot of time with you...Great work!
Sam
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very nice work i love it keep up the great work... very catchy piece
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love it
Great poem. I like the concept, from birth to present from a "how i've grown" point of view... I haven't been here long but you are one of the few i've seen so far brave enough to tackle rhyme. Thank you for that, i feel less alone
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I wonder about the loss of rythm on the last line on the first stanza though. Could add "patiently"? What comes to my mind is "leaving security for my birth". Umm, an edit lol. Realised that would result in two "leaving"' in the same stanza. Maybe "departing"...
The very last line too. I'm sure putting "own" in there would have occured to you but you've left it out for your own, lol, reasons. Maybe you're right
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I've only written half a dozen poems in my life time, what you see in this site really. I'm therefore a little unsure about offering criticism, even constructive. I'm certainly not trying to tell you how to write your poem lol. I've seen enough of you though in your profile etc to feel confident you won't take offence.
Thanks
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nice job wish i felt that way. wish i could have stayed in the womb and never leave.
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You made the decision to come here before you arrived. Look at everything as being part of a journey along every rugged road full of bumps and pot holes. But think about that beautiful valley and the amazing beach which is just over the horizon beckoning you. You will reach it if you keep moving forward and positive in your path.
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a good poem with rich meaning
well done...like your expression in this poem and its really impressive too... best of luck dear poetess
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this was a really great write. you have so much talent, its amazing! this was a really cool poem. keep them comin
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Awesome!
thank you for commenting on my poem for the contest, and telling me that it wasn't corret for the contest, but I just wanted to let you know that I still like the poem that i wrote. Also i really like the poem, and so i give you three smiles.
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I really like this poem. It is so hopeful and written in a way that will certainly give hope to others. Good write.
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Wow that was just fabulous. You know I feel that way sometimes and then boom I don't. I don't know if it's because I'm bi-polar or what, but it is hard. Maybe I should check out that free counselling here online. I'm truly at my wits end. I'm definitely known for my roller coaster life..
One thing is for sure is you are beautiful and I love the title of your poem. What I Like About Me. All the things you listed I truly could relate too. For I do help many because of so much abuse I have deep compassion for others.
Wonderful and beautiful you are, inside and out!!!
Blessings
Much Love Always,
Kelle Marie
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This is so wise and true! To be aware of our own strengths is an empowering thing. I'm so glad you're in such a good place.
Peace Georgia
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Thanks georgia
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Your rhythm and rhyme are great, as usual. I like the way the story of your life unfolded. I really enjoyed your talent. Shancy.
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Thanks sweet thang!
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You are right Janice, even though, sometimes I know that there are good things in my life.. I let that sneak away and allow dark or sadness in.
You have written a beautiful poem about self resect and self worth.
Bravo,
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Thaanks Chriss
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i like how you have made it rhyme and i like the powerfull message it gives full of hope and it makes you think that the light at the end of the tunnel dose egsist and isnt just a train
it shows us how you have solidered on
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Thank you.
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Janice, it's easy to see why so many do like you-you are a remarkable gal who has suffered more than her share and yet you still come out smelling like a rose because you choose to be an overcomer and not a "woe is me"- God bless you lady and I pray that you are constantly reminded of His great love for you and mighty plans He still has in mind for you~ love ~vj
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Luv ya Vickie.
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Life is a series of beautiful and unfortunate events. To learn from life's lessons is to grow as a human being. Thanks for sharing your story.
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Thank you for reading it.
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This was great I can totally relate to this. When I was 8 I had a bad experience that seemed to live with me for most of my childhood and I then got bullied because of it. Plus lots of other things which ended up in me hating myself and putting myself down constantly. I really didn't feel right in my skin. Now I am much happeir with a loving husband and daughter, but I still cope with mental illness on a daily basis. Some people understand others don't. Some people have lived very shallow lives, but I think that you would agree with me when I say that people like us have lived a lifetime twice over compared to that of people who have not really lived or experienced stuff. Our bad childhood has made us into stronger adults that can cope even better because we had to and even though we may still have down days life is much better than what it ever was. Thanks for sharing.
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Awesome write here honey
Yes we must though life see our future ahead in what we so want and need and always be true to ourselves and bring the light into our own lives and know we are our best friends to see life as a joy not sorrows for as we leave the sorrows behind and help others we see the light and ourselves shine with a love so true and it all comes from you
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Thank you. I miss you where are you?
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Excellent
Truly a well-crafted piece, deserving and 
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Excellent, well said.
I suppose as I get older, I will learn to trust myself more.
Stunning work
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You will honey believe me as long as you accept that you have the power within you to be all the greatest that you want to be. You hold that power within.
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AH ... I like you too!
Soooo. Let us fit our likes into a friendship, hmmmmm?
Such an uplifting write! I especially loved this:
I found I had a loving heart
one that I could use
to help so many others
on their journey through abuse
Absolutely so cute!
Be well, Happy Healer!
Love
Myra
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Hi Myra,
I think it is great that we are friends. Thanks for this lovely comment.
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I'm reading your other poems cz i like the one on the darken my day contest so much (i also think i shud cz u took the time to comment on living.) I like this one a lot, i also think it proves wot ur comment said - that u have a different take on things. My version of that poem wud jus be one depressing monologue. hmm i think im gonna add u to my faves.
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hehehehe You are such a sweety.
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This is grest more and more power to you!!!
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you are a great poet , I will read more of your poems and what to write as well as you
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totally great so much truth in every line,
anyone can relate to your thoughts
good free verse flowing with good rhythn
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The birth of life... How well I remember that first adventure!
http://allpoetry.com/poem/321562 ( A souls journey )
Ahh but soon we discover reality is much different than our expectations
http://allpoetry.com/poem/338731 ( A mother's Scream )
You write your words with an artists gift with a smooth and flowing rhyme. Your vision touches the heartbeat of the dark side of human life. Yet leaves us within the sunlight of hope.
Great write my far away wife.
Hugs and kisses I send you from the eastern shores of the far away US of A,
Den
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So very true in all you say Jan, we all have lessons to learn in this lifetime, hopefully we'll transgress to a higher level each time.
To love yourself helps others to love YOU the person you have become and I thank God he sent you to me.
Love Joan
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this is really good...I am trying to think of sumthing for the contest but Im finding it very difficult....but I will try great write
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This is wonderful Jan and you will be able to guide many more people. What a great service you are offering here! The poem is evidence of a loving and compassionate spirit, and that is exactly what you are. I remember when you helped me, and I will always be grateful for connecting with you. Blessings to you, Patty
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You know, I hold great admiration in the fact that you can actually appreciate your accomplishments Aka something I'm not always able to do for myself. It's my belief, as I've stated before, that our mistakes could be such a great foundation for our lives if tended to properly.
You tend to get a better perception of the way life should be lived, when you screw it up enough times. I am someone who's made many mistakes, delt with dephession "well 99% of the way" and morphed my character based on my mistakes and accomplishments.
As I said in my poem entitled Now Or Never, only one can advocate for you, and that you is yourself.
Yes I know, I'm preaching to the quior but I feel inclined to share my perceptions with people on the poems they write.
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