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Intercession

Sweet kismet shows her wings
sunshine drenched
as hopes are suddenly alive, fulfilled.
Veil gently lifted,
revealing
no secrets.

A contest entry

Please critique the highs and lows! How does this make you feel? Where does this hit you?

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  • blind ecye dog
    October 17, 2008
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    Very nice and a well put together poem. Sounds like love. RED


    • Star Shine
      October 17, 2008
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      Yes indeed. Thank you for the comment and for the interesting contest. Congrats to the winners!


  • poetryality silver member
    September 20, 2008

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    I love it when anyone uses the word "kismet" The poem in and of itself is a classic. Brevity is the key. You spoke volumes of love, and trust within these few words. Excellent! I wish you well in the Comp!


    Much Love ♥

    Renee