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Obsession

Watching

your

every

move

from

the

sidelines,

waiting

watching

until

you

are

MINE!

Author notes

This picture inspired feelings of obsession of unrequieted love in me!

http://ladyshamisen.deviantart.com/art/Wandering-Child-52763049

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Comments


  • jazzcat gold member
    October 4, 2008

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    Perfect! I was expecting a lamenting piece with lots of sadness, so your writing really surprised me in the best way.


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    September 25, 2008

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    This is a good piece, I am not sure about the one word per line, it takes away from the feeling of the poem. Best to you in the contest


  • Flowergirl
    September 16, 2008
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    very nice good luck


  • Paloszoo gold member
    September 16, 2008

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    Interesting form for these 13 words. Builds up the suspense for the reader. Shows creativity and imagination. Good luck in the contest.