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If I Say So

Here I stand
silenced by your anger
numb because you admit that I am
an afterthought
that I was a result of your longing.
Of a deep passion
that should never have been.

You wish me nonexistent
hidden from your life
from your infinite presence.

Yet I am tied to you
ruined because of your reactions
My heart withers
because I find that
You could have been better.
Instead you strayed far from where you wished to be.

You find that I am not worthy
of your love
that I foreshadow all your dark memories.
A time that you only wish to forget.
I won't let you though
because I deserve more
I deserve your love
your protection,
your name
after all I am your child.

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  • sunsunny3235
    April 20
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    I likethis but it seems unfinished, try and brush it up, k?


  • sillsill44
    April 13

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    this is really sad. i like this a lot. this like truly describes how a child who is abused feels. i know because im abused. i reall love the emotion and my favorite lines are "I deserve your love
    your protection,
    your name
    after all I am your child" i love these lines because parents bring there children into the world children dont chose to be born. Parents should love there kid and not hurt them. i really love this good luck in the contest


  • Symphony
    February 17

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    Yikes, this was heavy -

    And oh so very moving, that opening stanza, where the child is told that they were a mistake; that is just heartbreaking -

    Whilst children may not always be born in perfect circumstances, the event of new life is, in itself, a gift, and should be treated that way -

    Otherwise, why go through with it? My heart goes out to all children who are disliked, and mistreated, because their parents 'can' ....

    Very moving write, thanks for entering


  • Shakes-spear
    October 5, 2008
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    sad

    So many parents don't see the real picture. A child is a gift and if you just look at it like that life is better. There is no better feeling than looking into the eyes of your child and hearing the words "I Love You!" and that works both ways. This is as wonderful as you are! The Shaker


  • toomysterious
    September 30, 2008

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    This is excellent in emotional impact and the ending done so well. This weeks poll will be so hard there are so many good poems out there.


  • quantumsurveyor
    September 30, 2008
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    Mein grosser Gott! What a sharp and acidic and unexpected ending. A notable feat - and if you could give the parent a good kicking it would be a notable feet! Perhaps a harder look at the punctuation, sentencing and capitalization of lines could make this even better.

  • piccola silver member
    September 28, 2008

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    WOW. This reminds me soo much of someone I know. I am keeping it on the reading list ... you should enter it in the poll. If you want it removed, just tell me.


  • Kia Tenshi
    September 16, 2008

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    I especially like how you never talk about the parent/child relationship until the very end!!! Styles like that keep the reader interested!
    Very nice.

    • trekkergirl
      September 17, 2008
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      glad you liked it. This is the first of these that I have ever tried to do. It wasn't as hard as I feared it might have been.

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