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wrapped

This lovely little angel
doesn't realize
exactly how he's got me wrapped
around his little finger.

All he has to do is cry
and I'm there
picking him up
holding him close
protecting him
from all the evils of the world.

I never knew I could hold so much love
til I held this newborn
life in my arms.

Now all I want to do is
love him,
protect him.
cherish him.

I never knew that something so small,
so noisey,
so demanding,
could have me so completely wrapped
around his fingers.

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  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    October 1, 2008
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    A beautiful picture and your words breathe life into it
    --Well done & Best of luck in the contest!


  • Flowergirl
    September 28, 2008
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    aww very sweet i loved it best of luck great write...


  • JustFallingApart
    September 22, 2008

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    lol yep, sounds just like a baby. I realy liked this poem. Babies are such beautiful wonderful things that can only be loved more and more. Realy liked this, good luck.


  • hope4revolution
    September 22, 2008
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    this is a very nice, sweet poem. i really like "I never knew I could hold so much love/ til I held this newborn/ life in my arms". one thing is that i think you should maybe stray away from over-used phrases like "wrapped
    around his... finger" because it detracts from the overall power of your piece. thanks for sharing!!


  • Meroza
    September 20, 2008
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    Eww, I mean aww, no eeew, you get 15 eew points, no aaw...A heck I forgot the difference


  • going nowhere
    September 16, 2008
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    i like it as it is, too... just over the word limit. but wow... this was really sweet.


    • trekkergirl
      September 17, 2008
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      thanks. Didn't even realize taht there was a line limit til someone mentioned it. Oops.


  • Samplette gold member
    September 16, 2008

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    This is so lovely. You did what I did though, there is supposed to only be 30 words or less. This is a keeper though.
    Sam


    • trekkergirl
      September 16, 2008
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      oops didn't realize that this had a line limit.... Oops. Oh well, I like the poem just as it is.

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