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Saints Within Sinners

Animated we carry a light,

it flickers from within.

It will not overwhelm us,

as it nudges us from sin.

 

The light can rise and illuminate,

it can wither; but won't die.

We can choose to ignore it,

to deny it, would be a lie.

 

Rising to perfection,

as saints have often done.

Lost their direction,

is the sinner without son.

 

In the middle are the ones,

that will not fly nor fall.

Who recycle and recycle,

who refuse to heed the call.

 

I choose to rise above me,

as I am weary from the climb.

I will embrace the warmth of the flicker,

and whispers of the chime.

 

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  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    October 3, 2008

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    Profound as well as truthful message within this well-written composition--
    Excellent flow of the rhyming verse.
    --Nothing at all forced!
    Well Done & Congratulations on the Award!

  • Ace - LightWithinMe
    September 25, 2008
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    Hello. Congratulations on the Honourable Trophy. Nice write, once again, no need to state my stance on within really, ahahha. Your second to last stanza is the most insightful to me; for it reads that only those who fail to become polarized in terms of self or selfless come here again and again. Very interesting. Anyway, once again, congratulations. My regards.


  • Ken-Maverick
    September 22, 2008

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    Oooooh nice one you've penned
    I really like the last two stanzas

    Thanks heaps for entering
    All the best
    Ken


  • Moonlightdragon gold member
    September 21, 2008

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    enlighten

    heart felt lines of enlightened insight! These words are a gift to all
    These are a gift to me.
    " The light can rise and illuminate,
    it can wither; but won't die.
    We can choose to ignore it,
    to deny it, would be a lie"


  • Providence
    September 18, 2008
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    This is indeed a very profound piece of work.

    "In the middle are the ones,

    that will not fly nor fall.

    Who recycle and recycle,

    who refuse to heed the call"

    It could be karma, or the conditions of hell, but it is definitely a chosen circumstance...degrees of agony or pleasure that can be suffered for eons before one desires to end the cycle.

    Outstanding work!

    Marianne

  • goalsv
    September 16, 2008
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    Forgot your applause.

  • goalsv
    September 16, 2008

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    Very well done, a nice way of showing that we really are both. We try and fall yet in the end we will get to be with Christ in Heaven.


  • Puppydog gold member
    September 16, 2008

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    BEAUTIFUL!!!

    So many of us try to do right and seem to often stumble, we catch ourselves and try again. Maybe one day we will rise up and succeed in our attempt.


  • who iam
    September 16, 2008

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    Outstanding !

    That flame that flickers has a name,
    it's called our spirit which gives us hope
    much like this write provides anyone that reads with inspiration and a strong sense of direction.
    Metaphores that touch ones soul weaved throughout...
    Good Luck!


  • Nicada silver member
    September 16, 2008

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    Beautiful and packed with much wise advice. It is obvious that you have grown to a higher level than many ever do already. Great job with the prompt, and I wish you all the best in the contest. Blessings, Patty


  • plainoljoe
    September 16, 2008

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    second verse is right on the mark!! And what precceded and followed, are words I pray more people take to heart

    Joe

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