Smoking alone against the side of
Benito's taco stand. He hits up a
transvestite for three more fags,
and a bump of speed, prior to his
nightly stroll to the Formosa Cafe.
They call him 'Kid Sunflower'.
Nine lives
Tonight it's a Doctor. Tomorrow
a Jew. Everything they give him
was never brand new. His chin
is of granite, and his bare chest
their shrine. His pants hang, tossed,
upon chair backs, antique, fine.
Saved the kitty
Drinking Gray Goose, he nods at
a prospect, before kissing his date.
The brushing of his lips against the
neck of midnight saying "no rebate".
Bending both ways pays for his days.
Lonely at a motel window on Normandy.
But not the
After love, then a shower, he sees
an envelope with his name big in teal.
Unlicked, it easily opens, exposes to
him the faces folded with their dates.
Lubricating the smells and textures of a
million steadilly increasing fingerprints.
Milk
Author notes
Written January 21st, 2004
In a list
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You made prostitution sound normal and habitual. I guess you are right.
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oh right you are, that would be incorrect grammar- I guess I meant "Nothing they gave to him was EVER brand new", otherwise it'd be a double negative...
And thank you. It's a fun line.
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Loved your motto, by the way.
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Nothing, would be incorrect grammar.
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I loved this one because you didn't write about a girl...there are plenty of excellent poems about bruised young women, but this is the first Male Prostitute poem I've ever seen, and for that I have to congratulate you, 'cause there's not a lot of subject matter I haven't seen.
Favorite part: "Everything they gave him was never brand new", though maybe 'nothing' would fit in better. Anyway, awesome poem.
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damn you pissed someone off or else she was in love with you , refering to tramp comments up above lol~~your writing is harsh and bares the stain of life , as is written and it is told, boldly going where i am sure many on this site haven't..in truth i loved it , every seedy aspect, cat
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more alluring than a tramp with nickels in her bra. vo,.
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there are 6 means in the dictionary for tramp which one are you refering to that I am
6 entries found for tramp.
tramp ( P ) Pronunciation Key (trmp)
v. tramped, tramp·ing, tramps
v. intr.
To walk with a firm, heavy step; trudge.
To travel on foot; hike.
To wander about aimlessly.
v. tr.
To traverse on foot: tramp the fields.
To tread down; trample: tramp down snow.
n.
A heavy footfall.
The sound produced by heavy walking or marching.
A walking trip; a hike.
One who travels aimlessly about on foot, doing odd jobs or begging for a living; a vagrant.
A prostitute.
A person regarded as promiscuous.
Nautical. A tramp steamer.
A metal plate attached to the sole of a shoe for protection, as when spading ground.
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[Middle English trampen, to walk heavily, from Middle Low German.]
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tramper n.
trampish adj.
trampy adj.
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tramp
Tramp, v. t. [imp. & p. p. Tramped; p. pr. & vb. n. Tramping.] [OE. trampen; akin to LG. trampen, G. trampeln, LG. & D. trappen, Dan. trampe, Sw. & Icel. trampa, Goth. anatrimpan to press upon; also to D. trap a step, G. treppe steps, stairs. Cf. Trap a kind of rock, Trape, Trip, v. i., Tread.] 1. To tread upon forcibly and repeatedly; to trample.
2. To travel or wander through; as, to tramp the country. [Colloq.]
3. To cleanse, as clothes, by treading upon them in water. [Scot.] --Jamieson.
Source: Webster's Revised Unabridged Dictionary, © 1996, 1998 MICRA, Inc.
tramp
Tramp, v. i. To travel; to wander; to stroll.
Source: Webster's Revised Unabridged Dictionary, © 1996, 1998 MICRA, Inc.
tramp
Tramp, n. 1. A foot journey or excursion; as, to go on a tramp; a long tramp. --Blackie.
2. A foot traveler; a tramper; often used in a bad sense for a vagrant or wandering vagabond. --Halliwell.
3. The sound of the foot, or of feet, on the earth, as in marching. --Sir W. Scott.
4. A tool for trimming hedges.
5. A plate of iron worn to protect the sole of the foot, or the shoe, when digging with a spade.
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hmmm...too many days, it seems, where sunshine fades to an aching grey and you see nothing but black clouds on the horizon...
this is sweat, grit, dirt, and a shot of vodka mixed together...
very nice.
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i like that i was reading your poem and you had another in it, very cool i don't think i've see some one do that on here
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Not beautiful, or smoothing things over-ish, but realistic. I suppose it's well written, for this subject.
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On the Money
Interesting subliminal message you've got sandwiched in here.
The face of the poem is slightly seedy, smelling of sweat, aftershave and tobacco - but the well woven texture is soon apparent as we uncover the verses and this has legs -- context and imagery -- nothing too mysterious, but yet, celebrating mystery even as you reveal all. (How the hell do you do that?)
You've got at least one great pull line from each stanza (nah, ain't gonna quote 'em here) and this rolls off the mental tongue without misstep or stumble. This isn't new either, but you've sure dressed it up nicely.
Well done. Interesting subject - as alien as it is, I find I can see it all quite clearly - as if I were watching HBO.
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exceotional work
this is amazing. I see a strong writer who is very talented. really great imagery! write on and keep up the creativity! enjoyed much!
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dont tell me i have tothink i am one onf the great unwashed i justlet things wah over me...great write over pilt milk i cry and cry
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