Our father Allen Ginsberg
who is in heaven
throwing spit balls
at our muse laughing.
Holy is your name
among the poet and the beat poet
of your generation.
Your kingdom has come
Your poetry books sit
quiet in the stacks
where you walk as a ghost.
Thy will be done
writing poetry, being a dissenter,
Who looks to find peaceful middle ground.
On earth
Poets look for fame
accolades of praise
Lip service that's empty.
In heaven
There are no great men in heaven
all men who enter are equal
even the poet politic.
Give us our daily bread
words and word play
is our banquet
Poetry is the feast.
Forgive us our trespasses
Poets who make poetic mistakes
not using metaphor and punctuation
who try to find ourselves with words.
Forgive those who trespass against us
Those who mock our words
lack understanding, They listen
to our words with their ears and not hearts open.
Lead us not into temptation
To abandon our art
to let our pen go dry
to let our page stay white, without spilling the pen's
blood ink.
Deliver us from evil
Not to sell our art
for just a dollar.
But hope to sell books of our art
so men may read our word, so their hearts hear our words
to help save all men.
Amen.
A contest entry
- Mosaic by Ms. Black Eyeliner.
700 points, ended September 18, 2008, 27 entries
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4620 points, ended October 5, 2008, 64 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hah. Like I'm really gonna have one. by backdrop.silhouette.
1000 points, ended September 28, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Beat Generation by GirlAnachronism.
475 points, ended September 29, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Please, read the rules...
This particular contest is for pre writes with between 20 and 40 lines with no trophies. As brilliant as the poem may be, it doesn’t meet the criteria of the contest. I’m sorry.
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Wonderful parody
I have really enjoyed it thanks a lot for entering and giving me a still harder job
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haha, i like how you took something as sacred as the Lord's Prayer and turned it into a poem about Ginsberg. it reflects the religious aspect of the beat generation. not sure how well it works, though. thanks for entering!
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I found this a touching, thoughtful and clever piece. Couple of thoughts: do you mean dissenter as decenter is not a word? Maybe mistake should read mistakes? The final verse does not really convince but blowed if I can make any concrete suggestions.
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This gave me a chuckle . . .
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i liked this but was a little bit hard to understand until i figured out that you were telling us what you meant by each passage it was a clever way of putting it i thought and it was an interesting all round poem
welldone
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i love the take on the apstoles creed
great job well written good luck in the contest
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hahaha love it
nice take on the lords prayer
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Great stuff...
Fantastic!!!
Profound with an underlying humour that was endearing in and of itself...
Clever, thoughtful & inspiring...
Great narrative, rhythm & flow (as always)
Another powerful & enthralling write that had me captivated throughout...
Well penned, well versed, well done!!!
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Powerful Writing
I like this a lot. This is very powerful writing, I got the impression that this was written tongue-in-cheek too. I particularly like the ending stanza here too. Never a truer word said here. This is a gold piece to me my friend. Powerful writing indeed.
Dark Wishes
Wayne Leon
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THIS WAS AMAZING!!! i def. believe this to be your BEST piece EVER!!! and why is not in a contest??? winning GOLD??? ... cos it should be !!!
who is in heaven
throwing spit balls
at our muse laughing. ... the picture here is hysterical ...
Poets who make poetic mistake
not using metaphor and punctuation
who try to find ourselves with words.
Those who mock our words
lack understanding, They listen
to our words with their ears and not hearts open.
.. those two verses are so true and remind me to always stay open and available to something new ...
GREATNESS!!!
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