On a recent trip to the zoo
There was a hullabaloo
The children of year 9
Along with Miss Hyne
Caused an evacuation
Which left everyone in anticipation
You see miss hyne
Thought it would be fine
To jump in with the bears
To help with the kids questionnaires
See they couldn't quite figure out
What was with the bears snout?
So she was about to climb over the wall
When the security guard gave a big call
"What do you think your doing"
Everyone started booing
But what they didnt see
Was the bear had stolen the key
To open the cage
Which sent everyone on a rampage
They finally put the bear in his home
So he could no longer roam
At the end of the day
The zoo thought it would be okay
To keep year nine
Along with Miss hyne
As there main feature
Because the teacher
Was really a monkey
And was really funky
Author notes
lol the teacher told us to write a poem about how year 9 are animals. Her actual name is miss hyne so this kinda backfired on her lol. hope you like it
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Comments
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Wonderful
Very creative and well done. So very expressive. Best of luck in the contest.
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This was cute! The story was funny and you carried the plot line along very well. It started out flowing very smothly...but the middle had some choppy spots with awkward wording. With some more work, this could be an even more enjoyable read.
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Funky monkey! Nice job!
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lol
a little bit forced but still pretty good -
this made me giggle lovely, m'dear, just lovely!
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5 stars!
lol thats so true, Ms Hyne is really funky! lol
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