I hurt
and you hurt me
Words are just words
actions surpass that.
I bite my lip and hold off
I bit so hard
you talk and talk
what you say means little
if nothing.
muscles bleed
I'm denied
and you deny me
I lay in my bed.
my bed, not ours
and I force a smile
you can't see
watering in my eyes
I lay down
and cover myself
I'm invisible
and you don't see me
You never even took
a glance at my body
never even ran your
hand over my cheek
didn't even hold my hand
after you said you'd love me
after you said that I could be yours
I don't feel you
and you wont even try
every word your unintelligent gape
slews out hurts.
sharp words from a dullard
who knew? right.
well I did.
you'd say "I miss ..."
"I want..."
"I wish that..."
and I knew that
it was never me
I understood
and you didn't
I understood every implication
behind every word you said
I comprehended that it was
not me you imagined
every time you touched me
every time you held me
it wasn't me in your arms
I cried
and you looked away
do you even care?
do you even realize that
I'm still a person
I've still my emotions
or are you so convinced that
I'm some conveniently placed
self heating companion doll that
you can dig your claws around
my insides and not harm a thing
I'm alive
and you're dead inside
I am alive.
and you're cruel
I am alive
and your sharp lips leave cuts
leave kisses on me
Author notes
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wrarw!™
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Fantastic
You sucessfully displayed an powerful image & emotion within the very first stanza, and from that you continue to pump out raw heartfilled emotion. I loved it, particularly because the situation is familiar to me and you captured the same feelings that i felt when i had a similar experience. I think it is wonderful to be able to take something so angry and powerful and harness it into one powerful piece.
Great job, this was beautiful.
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The whole last stanza I could do without, it's honestly a bit cliche, though the last two lines are good. This is the first of your poems that I've read and not particularly liked, it seems a bit whiney to me. But within it there are a number of good images and ideas, it just drags on a wee.
Hopefully you get what I'm saying,
Steve
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yeah I don't like it at all. I was just kinda bored and frustrated. I should never write when I'm emotional... it's Always crap. I'll probably end up deleting it or re writing it later.
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awww..
this is an awesome write bro 
i enjoyed every bit quite sad tho could feel the emotions in it too.
this was powerful...
your sis
~LadyLuff~
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aww baby
*hugs you* this literally made me cry
but it was well done *shushs your msn comment*
great job babe
Your Gay Lover,
Petals
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