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Rayne, Rayne go away...

Freedom calls
At the edge of this razor.
Leave me alone
Let me go.
I dont want to hurt anyone anymore.
Never again, never again.
Go on, go on... Dont look back.

Forgive me, Father, for i have sinned!
Razor blade butterfly, flutter across my skin.
Oh, God... cant I begin again? [...]
Morning comes too soon.

Gray stained, blood stained halo.
Rain, rain, go away...]
All I want is to start over. [not possible.. not possible..]
Call me, maybe you'll save me from.. this.
Eternal darkness, a sweet lullaby.

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every line means something.
yes, i know it doesnt flow so well lol
but this is how it turned out.

so please, ^.^ ... dont tell me that a line sucks or doesnt belong
because you have no idea O.o

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Comments

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  • k.a.s.s.i.e
    March 19

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    your lines are great i think it's an awesome? poem. i'm not good with words, but it's really good, so yea.

    kAsSiE


  • Dark Otter
    January 15

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    And it is good poetry. 'Razor blade butterfly, flutters across my skin' is a powerful image in a poetic phrase. Well done, poetess.


  • XXheartbroken3XX
    January 10
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    this poem is soooo cool... it put images into my head.
    very cool.!
    XoXo


  • tawk gold member
    October 21, 2008

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    Please don't go away! What a sad and heartfelt write. So full of vivid imagery. Keep up the amazing writing. hugs Theresa

    • BrokenWings...Fly
      January 17
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      Im not going anywhere now
      I thought it over and decided not to. I have friends on here I cant abandon

      Thank you for your comment ♥

      -Rayne


  • Lost Emo
    September 22, 2008
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    wow i thought u said u sucked at poetry? lol that was awesome ^^


  • James R
    September 19, 2008

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    Great write my friend and hey all poetry should mean something to the writer it makes sense to you thats all that counts

  • Was
    September 18, 2008
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    you must be crazy! it's wonderously written

    I really love it i dont see why you think it seems awkward


  • eves shadow
    September 17, 2008
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    Its absolutely perfect.

    Hope you feel better.

    Thanks for sharing.


  • Immortal Beloved
    September 17, 2008
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    this line sucks and that one doesnt belong


  • movedon
    September 15, 2008

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    Lol

    RAyne, Rayne, come my way!

    so sad honey. I'm praying for you!!! Never give up!

    I love you girlie!
    Mylee

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