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Pretty Looking Demons

It's a pretty looking demon,
flashing out from the fluorescent halos.

It's razor-sharp, though

and its looks can kill you.

Drawn to its shape,

like a foolish moth to flames,

it finds its way to me,

and fits into my grasp.

                                [[too perfectly]]

 

Unknown to me, it falls,

sharp-side down onto my fair skin.

I don't feel very much--

this demon is sly.

Angst and emotion

with hate and regret drip to the floor.

My tears dry at last,

and for now, it has all passed.

                                 [[too quickly]]

 

 

Years pass and tears clash,

time flies and thoughts relapse.

And every day my head's more level:

and I'm done striking deals with the devil.

 

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One of 2 entries in 'make me feel'

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  • HaileeDear
    November 6, 2008

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    again, with all the emotion and deep thinking. i do love a powerful write at 8:40 at night. just what i needed. kept me hanging on throughout the whole piece :]]

    <3


  • Le Fille Morte
    October 24, 2008
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    Ohhh, I love it!!! Yes yes yes, this is exactly what I wanted!! Great write, thanks for entering


  • Carris
    October 20, 2008

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    Hey, i loved the power in this poem. You did i good job on this!! Definatly the last stanza was my favorite it sealed the poem. good job. keep writing!

  • Cena-of-Destiny
    September 18, 2008

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    Excellent! Nice job, good luck in my contest! Very different from what i'm used to reading, really awesome!
    <3

    -Cena


  • zhaniswolf
    September 17, 2008
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    cool. emotional demons. very nice. worded great too. flows real well (unlike my comment; sorry). i liked it. thanks.


  • KyleBerg gold member
    September 16, 2008
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    I found this poem sad and a little creepy, i loved the way it was written. I like the whole poem and i particularly enjoyed the last four lines, though i was kind of wondering what the last [[too ___]] would be, only to find there wasn't one hehe, doesn't matter too much.

    Excellent work

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