I stand at your grave and silently weep
Daddy dearest your promise you didn't keep
You promised to love me and hold me tight
But then you slipped away into the night
For many years you'd battled with drugs
Been involved in robberies and hung out with thugs
For years you were in jail and got real buff
The soft beautiful man had been replaced by tough
So much confusion surounded my life
Daddy dearest you were always in strife
Meetings with welfare, assessing where I should go
All I ever wanted was a home
I'd been in foster care for most of my years
Daddy, you were never here
When I was five you got released from jail
We'd spend time together and have fun, but to no avail
To the harry, the h, the junk you returned
But this time you got permanantly burned
Found In a car in summer heat
With your maker, you did meet
Author notes
2. Write about an addiction. Positive or negative views are welcome.
My father died from a heroin overdose when i was 6. I am adopted because both my parents were addicts.
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That is a very sad story. I am very sorry that this had to happen to you.
The poem I like, although it is a common story and rhyme does not help with taking away the cliche it kind of works for you because of the feelings behind it.
Thank you.
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Hard hitting writing, you have pushed a lot of emotion and pain into this writing, good stuff!
All the best Jeff
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Thanks for your comment on my poem. Glad that you liked it :-)
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Honest
This would have been difficult to write, and it would have been emotional for you to write. It is very honest, beautiful and truthful and i admire you for this fantastic piece. Children should never have to live with their parents addictions because as you wrote, all they want is there parents true and honest love and its unfair that you had to loose someone so important to you. My heart is out to you. Your adoptive parents are lucky to have such a talented daughter and ur lucky 2.
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Beautiful
Well this is a beautiful write filled with emotion and truth. You told the whole story and I really did enjoy it. I am so sorry to hear about your parents being addicts, thats not a nice life to be born into but at least you were adopted and had a family who cared and loved you. thats what counts.
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Glad you enjoyed it and thanks for your hearfelt comment.Exactly at least i have two wonderful parents, i'm very lucky.
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This is a really great poem.
In this poem you told a whole story, I like that.
I'm sorry about your dad. I hope things get better for you.
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Thanks for your kind comment...glad you liked the poem. It was a while ago that my dad passed away so its ok for me mostly.
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Time may go on, but I am sure this is still a tough one to touch. I commend your bravery. This felt very heartfelt and passionate. I enjoyed how the piece really lays out the story. I thought a few lines could use an adjective thrown in certain places to improve the timing of the poem, but this is not my story. Very impressive!
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thanks for your comment on my poem. Its weird how much it still lives in me and affects me. My partner commented that i write so much about heroin that it seems like i have been a heroin addict, but my parents addictions have affected my life so much that i cant help but write about it so much
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