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I saw you on the beach

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I saw you on a beach
last night
you talked to the wind
and seemed to hear her
yet you cannot hear
me

I saw the way you love
your lover
the sea
he tickled your toes
caressed your legs
made love to you
he was not
me

I saw the way you smiled
when, in my dream
I pressed my lips
to your skin
and held you
that smile
was for me

 

 

 

 

 

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Contest inspirstion is http://allpoetry.com/images/ext/Item/4601/451.jpg
Ocean Breeze by Steve Hanks

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  • Amera gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    This is wonderful! I, like you am trying to learn exactly what makes good FV. This is great FV in my opinion. It's not just a wonderful dedication, it's a masterpiece in creative writing.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • perfectsunset gold member
    September 17, 2008

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    Wow; I love your background!
    This was such a stunning write.
    Passionately penned
    and such lovely thoughts.

    Thanks for sharing & best of luck


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 16, 2008

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    Oh you soft git!

    This is a good half-notch up on your usual FV.



  • Dalaney gold member
    September 16, 2008
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    for you.

    Love, Lane


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    September 16, 2008

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    I love the background for this, she is beautiful.
    The perfect inspiration by the look of it.
    The poem is pretty good as well.

    All the best in the contest

    Sue

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