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One, two, three… let’s skip to seven
underwritten value-added
amassed accrued petrodollars
unit pricing, profit sharing…
underwritten value-added
commerce franchise fly-by-nighters
shrink-wrapped shopping supermarkets
people shouting advertisements…
amassed accrued petrodollars
built a hot tub and a spa; then
hired servants, ate till bloated
liver failing, heart arrested…
unit pricing, profit sharing
backyard flings, suburban scenes;
ah, I love it, but to live it?
For most, it's but a far-off dream…
Author notes
a 'retourne'
I was going to title it "Commodity Dreams", but I knew the average reader would picture someone dreaming on a commode...
A contest entry
- Retourne to Form by GreenHrtPaleMoon.
1175 points, ended September 21, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Deep, creative, attention drawing. A tad bulky, but still very readable. This is definitely a unique way to feature your retourne. Best of luck!
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yes, bulky, sometimes we need a steak over a baloney sandwich... lol
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I would have not thought of it as a commode. ha ha. I really like the format, & style of this. This is a very deep poem you have penned here. Good luck in the contest. In Love & Light... Blessed Be! ~~Iridessa MoonFlower~~
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