O wonderful bygone days of my youth,
in which doomsday I would raise if I lost a tooth,
Where friends and relatives gathered around me,
for my money and power everyone hailed me.
I could move moutains with my strength.
For the pursuit of love and wealth I would go
to any length.
Power, health,fortune and love, I had them and
I did not appreciate.
I am not sure what I now have but health we could
certainly depreciate.
Faith I disregarded in those wonderful days.
Now I am left in his care contemplating the seven skies,
reflecting on every nice moment I could have enjoyed,
instead, in the pursuit of power and my own pleasure many who loved me I annoyed.
Pain, regret, weakness, solitude and illness is all I have got.
And I am confined here on this wheelchair until I rot.
My Lord, grant me final rest, peace and eternal slumber,
instead of being a burden to those, who, in the past,
would do everything to be in my favor
A contest entry
- Pre-Write Appreciation Day 2008 by Kimojuno.
1447 points, ended October 8, 2008, 40 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewritten contest for all by serenity silvermoon.
490 points, ended January 30, 90 entries
Honorable mention
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400 points, ended April 21, 24 entries
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Nice write Thanks for entering
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rules rules rules
Dear Poet,
Thank you for submitting your poem Handicapped Fading Existence into my contest I SIT and I ROCK and I WAIT.
Please return to the rules. There, you will take note that AUTHOR'S NOTES requires you to place something in the box.
Once you've complied, please notify me and I'll be pleased to enter your entry into the contest.
A few comments on the content of your work:
You've captured the essence of self-pity rather than resignation or reconciliation.
Your meter needs pruning to shape up this piece.
You have awareness and a definite desire for
demise.
Notify me when you've complied with the
rules.
'Till then,
Best wishes,
Liquid -
1st of great job on the silver trophy 2nd if you ever need someone to talk to i will be here to listen you will not be a burnden onto me i love to help this poem was sad but a great poem and i thank you for letting out your feelings insted of holding them in because holding it in will only make you feel worse i hope things get better for you
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thank you so much dear for the honorable mention
You are most gracious. and thank you for being there of course.
Well thank God I am not talking here about myself or about anyone that close, but we are all going to age in which case I do home and pray God I age peacefully and graciously and I do not get handicapped and trapped in a wheal chair. What I meant here someone in her or his youth was the powerful and oppressive kind of person who disregarded others' feelings. worse this person is not repentant really of his past injustices but only regretful. I had in mind many people as example and what I could forsee what they would think in such situations.
thank you so much again dear
but I will certainly use your offer dear. Thank you so much for opening your heart for me.
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Thank you for sharing this poem, it really shows through your write the emotions that goes through the person's mind.
You show the regret and the sin, whether it is the sin of the past or still the sin of today, you show it in this poem. You pen it well and show the truth of what is truly important.
I hope that this is more a poem then reality for you,
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thank you so much for reading and commenting :)
My dear thank you for the silver trophy. I have not seen it since then. Thank you for appreciating it. Yes this is what I meant by this piece and I had a few people who oppressed others in their youth and some now for whom I am expecting the same fate. But some people do not feel it, they only lament and regret the bygone days of youth. Others think of whom they hurt and repent. Thank you. -
Thank you my dear Jeff
and thank you very much for the silver my dear
well it is not a reality for me but could be, not myself i hope, but i always thought of elderly people looking so harmless and invalid. were they good and kind in their youths? or evil?
i have many examples on my mind of people being so harmful now and so powerful that i imagined them in their old age!
Thank you so much Jeff. And I would never wish to be in their shoes, meaning not to step on anyone or hurt anyone or parade my strength and power and hurt the powerless.
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Good Job
Nice picture to with your writing. I have days in which I need the help of others. I hate those days!!! I pray for final rest, peace, and a way to be used by Him even as I am to help others. I have beeen working on the latter. I find that when I am used by God, then the firs two desires are lessened. It requires time and prayer. For all handicapped, I pray that God reveal to them His speacial use!!! God can use each and every person no matter their affliction!!! !!! !!! Keep up the great, deep writes!!!
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thank you so much my dear friend
Actually there was a better picture with an old man facing the sky in a contest, actually a painting and I meant to write this for it as it made me write it but i couldnt find the contest so i looked for another picture and i hope it says it.
well sometimes one is so tired of everything as to ask for that final rest and when one depends on others one feels too heavy, so sad. but we are all going to go through this if we are meant too. That is why we should try to enjoy every moment we can enjoy, make people happy, and do not hurt people who love us. and yes being used by God in order to help others and having the ability to give and help others is certainly great when we can alleviate some of the suffering and our time on earth has a meaning.
God bless you my dear.
Thank you so much for reading it and commenting
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SUCH DEEP THOUGHT!!!
This is something that has entered my mind many times. I have now come to the way of thinking that one should live life and with open heart and mind see all the beauty and love this world has to offer, never work until you drop just to make a buck, enjoy life and life will enjoy you.
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