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Dreams of a Tortured Soul

I can feel the warm blood
on my face,
Running down my pale arms.
You scream at me to go away,
and try to get me to stop,
but I can't,
I have already gone too far.
I am a monster oblivious
to love and pain, 
I take the life of those
I once loved,
and saved those I hated
the most.
Now, as I listen
to my little sisters screams,
and watch her cripple
body struggle against the
knife, I slowly end her life.
I watch her flesh fall apart,
showing bone,
then finally her heart.
I look at her heart
now beating in my hands,
and soon realize
this is not my command.
I look down at her pretty face,
but I am filled with
hate and disgrace.
I still hear her screams,
they haunt my dreams,
I once dreamed of love
and romance,
but now I see
darkness, fear, hate,
and blood.
I can smell their fears
in my dreams,
taste their blood on my lips,
but most of all,
I can still feel their pain.
I remember hearing the last
whimpers escape her lips,
and knew her soul
left her tiny body.
But that is when it hit me,
This is my cripple body,
this is my heart I hold
in my hands,
this is my crimson blood
I taste on my lips,
I know this is my soul,
I feel no more pain,
I feel no more shame,
All I can do now,
is watch helplessly,
as they take us away,

forever torturing our souls.

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  • Yah-rod
    September 25, 2008

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    Very impactive piece. Gains momentum after 13 lines, and from then on its imagery is very smooth, very graphic and...flowing! I liked the occasional rhymes, and the overall structure of the poem makes it more pleasurable and less 'painful!' to read.

    The imagery drags us kicking-and-screaming into the scene as it runs down our skin and moistens our lips, and likewise we can't help but feel your own empathy and emotional conflict as we hear the screams.

    When I reached the lines: "But that is when it hit me,
    This is my cripple body,..." I started to think the child was a metaphor of your own innocence. I think it's a literal metaphor, and it works very well in bringing us to realise how our perception of the world can change so much. In this way the poem plays on our fears as well as our feelings.

    Dramatic, impressive, and well-crafted.

    Mordegast


  • Flight of Dragons
    September 18, 2008
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    oh good

    Liked it good write, I'm not sure what to say but I did like it.