Lost keys at the beach, buried in the sand
People walk beside them, not willing to give a hand.
Brave waves crashing by, pulling them afar
Stronger and stronger these waves are bizarre.
Nobody wonders to who they belong
They all keep moving along.
Author notes
No one cares if someone’s lost,
The world’s gone wrong.
I am afraid of being left alone....
In a list
A contest entry
- Joys and Fears - Pay It Forward by Kari.
300 points, ended September 16, 2008, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Never Again Will This Hurt Me
Comments
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I appreciate this because it's outside of the box. Thank you very much for following the rules on that.
The only problem I had with this piece was line five with the whom. I am not sure but I just feel like that can be reworded in another way.
The other thing that I liked most about this piece was the flow and the deep personal meaning. You took your feelings and made it to where other people can relate.
Thanks for your entry.
Kari
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wow i really like this and its sooo very true.... you have an amazing way with words.... thanks for sharing and best of luck in contest.....!
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Great job. I think you have described the sense of being cast off and left alone very well. I like it alot. Best of luck in the contest.
Mike
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This was an amazing piece. I really did love this write. Amazing job. I loved how it was so short, yet so impactful. I think we can all relate to this at some point or another. Great, great job.
Tal.
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