a faerie floats on by
so beautiful that you would cry
it carries a single lily
you soon would act silly
and the lily plays a lullaby
and the moon sails the sky
the sirens soon sing
a pegasus offers a wing
these are dreams of a poet
it is just really hard to show it
Author notes
just to let you know, i love: faeries, lilies, certain lullabies, the moon, the fables of the sirens, pegasus, and i love being a poet
A contest entry
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hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm, i is hun-gray
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I love how you wrote everything you feel and made it all rhyme! You could work on the flow some, though. For example, in the following: "a faerie floats on by
so beautiful that you would cry" I would consider removing "that" you would cry. Also "it carries a single lily" I would change -it carries- to carrying a single lily making me act silly.
You get the point, work on this!!
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I undertand where koganei55 is coming from but I disagree. This world isn't about being perfect. In fact that concept is becoming even more distant than ever. Just be yourself. And you did.
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thx! i think u would make a very good family member! how bout it?
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mmmm lilies, my fav flower. <3
the moon errr i have my own feelings about lol
i liked this. I'd love to have a dream like this.. good imagtination
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It seems very disjointed, just a bunch of random thoughts thrown out there without rhyme or reason. I realize they're your thoughts, but they're to jumbled to really mean anything. It's just a bunch of images smashed together.
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