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sense-track

 


it's hard to grasp common sense;
heart's out of defense
musing, moping, not coping
and it's not amusing missing you
my ipod plays my playlist...
songs that sense-track
moments I can't have back

I can't even finish a chick lit book
I don't even care now how I look
I can't wallow in "girl" stuff
I don't go on dates nor call their bluff
I don't crave hazelnut gelatto and krispy kremes
I want to be with you in daydreams
cocooning in bed, spooning...

thoughts playing in my head
songs playing, I listen, hit repeat and sit
on the couch instead
it could take me the whole playlist
to be in a state like this
still it would take me longer getting over...you


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I suddenly thought of krispy kremes

ipod heart photo found from google

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  • ajocean silver member
    June 21
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    very nice piece keep the coming. it is nice to read you.


  • coloringmysenses
    March 13

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    I do this all the time!
    I try not to, just so then I don't get tired of listening to it, but I'm guilty of listening to a certain song at least 5 times in a row.

    Wonderful wording - I love every bit of it!


    • sense surreal gold member
      March 13
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      I tend to have a Last Song Syndrome with a certain song, sometimes it's all that I play and listen to all day...I know my neighbors would complain of hearing the same song over and over lol

      Thanks for the comment


  • badnovocaine
    January 17

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    You thought of Krispy Kremes and what came out was a piece of art, hmmm.... highly creative, if you can do that just from Krispy Kremes, you must be a very talented poet.

    Anyways really liked this, I am digging it and love the picture!!


  • poeticweaver gold member
    December 2, 2008

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    Getting Older Sucks.

    I can relate..

    my ipod plays my playlist...
    songs that sense-track
    moments I can't have back

    Very well penned sweet soul.
    Thanks for sharing you.
    Much love and light I send your way.

    -Timothy aka poeticweaver~ xo


  • twelveandahalf
    November 9, 2008

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    This is lovely. I can definitely relate to this.
    "musing, moping, not coping
    and it's not amusing missing you"
    I thought this was genius!
    Anyways good flow and write in general.
    (Also Krispy Kremes are fantastic


  • ConjurerCaptainTam
    November 4, 2008

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    you seem disheartned

    you are more

    you can still love

    love life

    and poetry

    if nothing else

    for you have the ability

  • mz.butter
    October 16, 2008

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    isn't it funny how you enjoyed life before him,and when he leaves you feel lifeless.that statement should give you strength because anyone who truely loves you would never want to suck the life out of you.


    • sense surreal gold member
      October 16, 2008
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      Hi mz. butter

      Thank you for your wonderful comment and for your wise words. I totally agree.


      Anna Lee


  • Summer52
    October 11, 2008

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    Sana palagi kang "praning"...
    So you can write verses like this one.

    Just teasing, Ann.

    Well expressed.


    Summer51

    • sense surreal gold member
      October 11, 2008
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      Yehey Mommy Summer happy to see you po on my page...yihi... Salamat po... praning na po yata talaga ako eh ahehe


  • second-born
    October 2, 2008

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    wow...I like this!!! nicely done and everything is so real...playing songs over and over again trying to forget someone is I think most of those brokenhearted ones do...excellent work kabayan!!!


  • Ken-Maverick
    September 17, 2008

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    K.K's Yuuuum

    I feel this aswell,
    sometimes its just so hard letting go of the one we care so much for.
    But life is full of ups and downs,
    the worst part is reaching zenith to only hit rock bottom.
    Feelin ya.
    Keep your head up and all the best to you

    Ken


    • sense surreal gold member
      September 17, 2008
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      Thanks Ken

      yeah, something we can't do anything about for the moment...


  • The Drifter
    September 15, 2008

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    I understand--the getting over is the hardest part and you wrote about it well.
    Thank you,
    bw

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