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Cinn City

She slices
her silver blade

through the
Valley of Tongue

sets course
a new river

where waters run
acidic blue

burning old bridges

lighting fire
to stagnant skies

no birds sing
lullabies here -

she washes
her wound

with the Devil’s
tears

raises a chin
in defiant glory

her testament
her story

too stunning
to be considered

anything less than

extraordinary.

Author notes

For my friend, with love.

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  • nature mithya gold member
    October 20

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    From Russia with love.

    I think of the Bond novel.
    There is both love and the chill.
    Maybe not, for I only see beautiful vampires
    and all their tricks to click.

    Congrats.

  • deercatcher
    October 16

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    Sounds dangerous to me. Hope she has one of those radio collars on her ankle at least. (It is a good place to stash a spare seegar, I hear)

  • Allan Emery silver member
    September 29

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    Quite frankly, I was absloutely shocked that I got two poems I put ahead of this. I never thought that would happen. This poem is powerful, beautiful and flawless. It did not have, however, as much of that raw edge I asked for in the contest notes as the ones finishing higher. I think that if you were more looking to honor your friend than to win the contest, you certainly could not have succeeded better. This is a perfect tribute to her and I, like you, feel the cut of that silver blade. Thank you so much for your wonderful entry.

  • Meej
    September 21

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    i cant quite get my head around this poem..i've read it 2 or 3 times now and It seems to be about self injury but is written so beautifully that it couldnt possibly be about cutting oneself. what is the valley of tongue?? i would love some further explanation of this poem.


  • Cinnarry gold member
    September 19
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    You ALWAYS GET IT Laney.


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    September 18

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    Anyone who had a poem such as this written in their honour, is one very luck person. So beautiful. Best to you


  • malmadre gold member
    September 17

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    Cinnarry just sweeps me away and you do too.


  • Myjoy gold member
    September 16

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    I think this is wonderful, and very well put together, the lay out makes it that much better. Well done.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    September 16
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    Humm. you have shown your heart in the words...well said..


  • silverfish
    September 16
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    i know this writer. she is extraordinary. the both of youse, i mean. -fish


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 16
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      FarsightedFish...

      She is extraordinary. A beautiful person. It means a lot to me that you liked this Thank you. Love, Lane

  • Swangrnv gold member
    September 16

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    Superb!

    geez, can you (or anyone for that matter) write a even more fantastic tribute than this? gosh, I'm so jealous! l.o.l. j.k. this is outstanding, and now I need to read this lady!


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 16
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      Swanie ;)

      You really do need to read her. You won't regret it, I promise. Thank you so very much for your beautiful support. Love, Lane
  • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
    September 16

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    'burning old bridges

    lighting fire
    to stagnant skies

    no birds sing
    lullabies here -

    she washes
    her wound'

    ... but I see soaring eagles reclaimed, flown and still flying...

    This is FANTASTIC!

    Sol


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 16
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      Sol

      I am thrilled to know you like this poem. I really am. It is for a fantastic lady. She deserves to be recognized by anyone who reads her. Love, Lane

  • arafura
    September 16
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    Exceptional poem about an exceptional poet!


  • Tennessee-Joe
    September 16

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    I love it. You captured her.

    Joe


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 16
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      Joe

      I hope I did. Just knowing you like this poem says it all for me. Thank you. Love, Lane

  • notorious
    September 16

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    I would call this abstract,
    but I understand this.
    LMAO.



    This is a fantastical dedication completely free of poetic zits (as per usual!!)

    "Valley of Tongue" is just so kick-ass I want to run in that valley and be just as poetic as you.

    I love the ditty with the birds and no lullabies--ingenius...!

    "stagnant skies" sounds freaking awesome!! I love it when you use soft alliteration because it's rare and always well-done.

    Those last 2 couplets...thoughtful and gorgeous.



    Jessica


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 16
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      Jess

      God, you sure know how to make me feel pretty damn good Thank you. Love, Lane

  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 15
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    You blew Jeff's chances? Ha! I didn't even hazard an entry!


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 16
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      well, I just read your entry and I'm up in the air with Jeff! lol
      Love to you, Beautiful Poetess....Lane

      • Mairi bheag gold member
        September 16
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        OK so I weakened and entered something

        Allan asked me to, and a sudden brainwave hit me, and so I surfed it. Yours is still wonderful.

  • Matt Holck
    September 15
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    damn straight

    I always liked haywire

  • csmmoms2
    September 15

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    Quite lovely

    "No birds sing lullabies here" my kinda line. Good imagery of love lost.
    Thankyou for your nice comments on "The canvas". I'm becoming your biggest fan.


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 16
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      Actually, this is not about love lost...more like the strength and vitality of a poet I so admire, and if you are becoming a fan of my work, then let me say this...the feeling is oh so mutual.
      Love, Lane

  • Sesheta
    September 15

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    What a poem for a friend! Each metaphor/image/sensation was poignant, real though abstract. Marvelous.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    September 15
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    My Lady,

    Yup from what I've read that's her.
    Right on cue.


  • balenciaga
    September 15

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    I love this. I haven't read too many of Cinnary's poems, but this is, per your usual, a classic poetry read .

    meg


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 15

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    I don't know this poet, but I've read a few of these dedications and I must say, I think I should know her! Especially after reading this gem you penned for her


    • Allan Emery silver member
      September 15
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      Let me second what Lane says. There is not a more talented poet on AP than Cinnarry. The depth of her writing is beyond description. There have been writes I have studied and studied, getting more and more impressed as I did.

    • Dalaney gold member
      September 15
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      you have GOT to read her...she is the best free verse poet on the sight - gutsy, beautiful, she is a woman of character Thank you for your comment, girl, and I am so glad you liked my tribute. Love, Lane

  • Amera gold member
    September 15

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    This poem is as original as the poetess its dedicated to. I just knew that you'd pen something fantastic in her honor. I shake my head and smile just because I'm so proud to know you.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • cricketjeff gold member
    September 15

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    Some muthahfooker just blew my chances!!!


    This is such an acute description of a superb poet. Great writing.


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 15
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      lol...falling on the floor...OMG...I'm still laughing!

  • IronMaiden1236
    September 15
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    God bless!!! @%@^%^&
    Fruity wankin bliss

  • Allan Emery silver member
    September 15
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    Straight to the finalists list!!!

    Bravo!

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