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I don't want to talk about you

Your name has not crossed my lips
since the day you moved away.
I tell my friends I don't want to talk about you,
that I am happy and I am okay .

If we want to get specific,
your just 204.1 miles away,
but when I am alone at night,
it feels like getting to you would take forever and a day.

Although I cannot see your face,
and I cannot feel your touch,
as long as I know you're in this world,
I can live with the pain that consumes so much.

But when I do start to think about you,
and my mind wanders back to days gone by,
I let my memories take over,
and I know my happiness is a lie.

Because I miss the way you stroke my hair,
and the way you hold my hand.
I miss the way you laugh at me,
and write our names in the sand.

I cannot look at rivers
without grinning from ear to ear,
and I cannot watch someone walk on boulders
without remembering my fear.

I laugh when I see someone leave food
as I imagine what you would say,
and I sigh when I am at the bus stop
remember how we stood there that day.

I can't walk into that restaurant
without ordering sweet and sour pork,
or eat my chinese without chopsticks 
as you taught me not to use a fork.

But all these things I will keep to myself
and I will continue to live my lie,
because I know that if I talk about you
I will begin to cry.

Author notes

Stanzas 5 to 8 are personal things that are only going to be understood by me and him, but I hope that you are able to see the meaning behind it and understand what I am saying without really understanding the situations I describe.



Colour me shutter-tone deaf
option one.

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    March 24

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    Aww this was so deeply heartfelt
    and emotional. I can definately relate.

    Beautifully expressed, your thoughts.

    Thanks for entering & best of luck

  • Very solid structured write, nice form and unforced rhyme...well written. Thematically the personal items (for only him) give this the authentic ring it needs to be wonderful.


  • Manda-Lou
    February 26

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    This was just as good if not better than the other you entered in "I MISS YOU!!!" that I commented on. You're a wonderful poet.


  • k.a.s.s.i.e
    February 25

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    this piece is sooo good! it's so sad and heartbreaking. the rhyme is awesome and descriptions are the best. good luck in the contest!

    kAsSiE

  • The personal meanings are things I add to my pieces. I understand this all too well, and believe me when I say I feel your pain, I'd like to tell you it gets better with time, but i've been without him for 3 months now, and It hurts more and more everyday.

    Thank you for sharing this!

    -B


  • Temptation.
    February 12

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    ouch. this is heartbreaking =[ i can feel your pain. this is good. thanks so much for entering and good luck.

  • Brilliant, just brilliant, so sad yet in away it kind of made me smile cos i felt like i was there with you as you talk about the happy times you had. I am so sorry that your situation ended up the way it did. This is a heart breaking write and i hope things improve. Thank you for entering my contest


    • Emerald-Eyes
      February 8
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      Thank you
      And thankfully things are starting to look up as I may be going to the same uni, so finger crossed things get sorted out when im back to being just 20 mins away

  • I understand exactly what you mean, sometimes distance can tear people apart more than they realize, thank you for entering.


  • Still Standing gold member
    January 19
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    enjoyed

    I enjoyed this particulary the first stanza. That was close to my heart! Great work and good luck

  • piccola silver member
    January 18

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    the last stanza is so truthful. There are many times that I am quietly keeping things to myself because if I talk ... I will cry. I guess all can relate. Thank you for entering


  • whispersoftly
    September 16, 2008

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    This is beautiful, it flows and its filled with love and adoration for the person you talk about, Even though the stanzas you mention are for you they make sens to the reader as they seem like normal couply things that people share when they are together!

    this is a lovely write very well done xx cheryl

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