[I tried to be perfect
but nothing was worth it]
nothing was worth you
>>>tried to be perfect
died to be p.r.e.t.t.y <<
((all I want is your &hearts)
bby read between the lines :: ||this|is||g|o|o|d|b|y|e||
you b/r/o/k/e me bby and while i tried to pick up the p i e c e s , you told me i was nOtHiNg ;; search between the clichés and , sweetie,,, you’ll find that we’re
f
a
l
l
i
n
g
apart because i’m just.not.good.enough [for you]
((I’m not doing this for attention,
just for your approval))
so hunny s h a t t e r me b-r-o-k-e-n- && leave me all alone while I ||dance||with||death|| and hope my jutting hipbones call you back;;
because bby I lied when I said you weren’t worth it
&hearts
Author notes
ehhhhhhh.
You can't tell because of the dirty-pretty-ness and the bby etc, but it's about my mother (the reason for my eating issues :/ ).
Inspired by the song "Pieces" by Sum41.
In a list
- Eating Disordorders Coping NOT Glorif group list • next in list
A contest entry
- The Dirty Pretty Contest by SchizoChic.
425 points, ended September 29, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - & sometimes the prettiness never dies♥ by Midnight-x-Rose.
400 points, ended December 30, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is really really good. Alot of emotion and i like the emphasis you used on words. My favorite part is "you b/r/o/k/e me bby and while i tried to pick up the p i e c e s , you told me i was nOtHiNg ;; search between the clichés and , sweetie,,, you’ll find that we’re
f
a
l
l
i
n
g
apart because i’m just.not.good.enough [for you]"
This part just stuck out to me the most. Great write, love it! <3
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i love how you can put all those creative "things" idk what there called. but this is a greeaaat poemm.
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bby read between the lines :: ||this|is||g|o|o|d|b|y|e||
I love that, and I think dirty pretty rocks.
The only Issue I have with it is that you don't use the whole word.
bby... is that baby? be back yet? boris becker yells?
I dunno.
Other than that, the poem rocks, and IO love the last line. It's so sad! -
I've learnt that the more you try to be someone else, the less you are like you... the less you are like you, the less you'll be unique & although being in the 'clique' is good in some ways, it wont help when the fad has died & you're just a nobody against a lonely curtain call. Loving someone, sometimes makes you do stupid things, like believe you need to be someone else, but if they care they'll like you for you and you only.
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Great
Hey, I like your style of writing, I love unique artistry, well done and strong message.
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wow.......
this is wow im so speachless
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omg this was amazingggggg, i think this has officially made me love dirty pretty! wooow! amazingly immense!
"bby read between the lines :: ||this|is||g|o|o|d|b|y|e||" - that was just absolutley genious!!!!!!
and he line "because bby I lied when I said you weren’t worth it" - was soooooo heartfelt! over all this whole peice was! great!
keep writing XXX
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Great write.
Captivating, holds attention.
COuld be used for different things but yes, it's a great write.
Good work.
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i liked thism, true words spoken from a girl who has been hurt, very good dirty pretty style! talnted writer!
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Great job. Best of luck
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wow. how amazing. How relatable.
drop dead gorgous.
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This is good. Usually, I don't lke the poems where the punctuation is a part of the poem, but you did really well here. Nice job!
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