Welcome to my tortured mind
beautiful and dark inside
walk with me in our dark romance
and we will fall in lust
This is the night we all will die
This is the night when we will fly
Lovers dance,
in ebon trance,
Where eternities are in ashes
and black magic in our eyelashes
&& each word we say draws me
further
into this illusion
&&forever rings like a
threat
of “I’ll always want you”
Welcome to my tortured mind,
where friend, lover, and rapist entwine
So desperate to give you all you want,
I gave you much more than I had
Here on the dark side of love,
maybe one day love poems
won’t read like suicide notes
but remember—
forever, oh forever
The universe in
your eyes and mine
when love and fear intertwine
&hearts
Author notes
umm. Idk. Like seriously.
Writer's block is still killing me.
I don't know. Really.
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Awesome
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Oohhh, I like this. Had a certain hurried pace to it, well placed rhymes, and the words themselves are fabulous. Probably the most tormented "love" piece I've ever read, but that's what gives it such a unique charm.
Well done.
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HAHA I LOVE IT!
Fav.parts.
Welcome to my tortured mind
beautiful and dark inside
walk with me in our dark romance
and we will fall in lust
........................
Welcome to my tortured mind,
where friend, lover, and rapist entwine
So desperate to give you all you want,
I gave you much more than I had
I liked those two the best, IDK y but I just liked them he best.
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Wonderful
Really amazing!
I love the way you wrote this.
I can relate.
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amazing
this poem is absolutely amazing
i can definately relate
overall an excellent read
keep up the writing! you really have an act for it!
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The mind
seems it does offer up pain as well as love. But alas in the early stages it is not really that bad. Write on young poet.
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....speechless....amazing poem
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u call that part of writers block? i think its amazing i love how u write great job!
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this is what happens when you have writers block? Gee... it's pretty amazing, then.
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"Welcome to my tortured mind,
where friend, lover, and rapist entwine
So desperate to give you all you want,
I gave you much more than I had"
I love this stanza... its beyond beautiful. If this is what you do with writer's block... wow. -
real good up until "and black magic in our eyelashes"??? picks back up well. This shows well what goes through the mind of someone in a co-dependent relationship. structure is a wee bit choppy, perhaps it works in the reading.
can relate to this,
good stuff
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