seasons bring on change ~
earth woods birds people evolve
without a standstill
Author notes
I made no mention of which seasons are now changing, but that adds to the mystique of this Haiku, in my opinion. If you don't life this theme go ahead and DQ!
A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XXXV - by Bear by Arkbear.
450 points, ended September 16, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Seasons must change - now it's summer to fall?
Comments
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Haiku...never tried it! I believe Arkbear is wrong...What I think is that you were talking about "Spring" it renews life and changes it into something different!
Good luck
darlintlc
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Hello ~
Not sure whyt you would be so quick to allow me to DQ your entry.....keep the Faith that your KU' is the best ~
*bring on* is a tad awkward ~
No commas after each direct noun disrupts my Flow the first time I read it ~
*without a standstill*.........very awkward.....to me ~
Not mentioning which Season is changing?
The Prompt was Fall....I would hope that is what you were/are speaking of ~
Thank you for entering....God bless you,
Bear ~
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Bandits United!
This is a well crafted haiku, showing an apparent simularity to the components of nature and also man. Change is perpetual and all adapt in their own way. Thanks for sharing this thoughtful poem.
Dennis
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Such a challenge
a nicely penned 'ku. Best of luck...
Ken
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