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a thousand needles

like the death of a thousand needles
    it lies motionless.....
in the stone cold silence
    it was abandoned in the dark.....
to be forgotten with out a glance....
at one time it was
    my beautifully renewed heart
          full of hope and wonder.....
he laid it casually on the rocks
    and walked away
     
          as if his hands had never touched it............

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  • Rashida
    June 7

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    I really like this piece, it leaves you hanging, wanting warmth. Its so very nearly chilling, but not quite. Fabulous!


  • whiterabbit.
    March 29

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    I love the emotions that can be felt in this and I just adore the first line. Well written and thanks for entering.