Called a freak and never let in
You emit a glimmer from deep within
They acted like you would never belong
Marching to your own drum, singing to your own song
You never bent to the will of the rest
You already knew that you were the best
They never let up, they tortured you day after day
Turned your blue skies quickly to gray
Still you went back and endured their taunts and jeers
You would come home and smile through your tears
You knew that their opinions meant nothing at all
And all they wanted was to see you fall
You kept your chin up but still their words stung
It's hard to have thick skin when you are young
You knew that you were better than those
Who looked down at you from the end of their nose
You are my first, my beautiful shining star
And you know I love you the way you are
I know no matter what they do to you
Your awesome light will always shine through
And that is the reason that line makes me cry
And now the whole world (of AP) will know why
I LOVE YOU
KEEP SHINING GIRL!!!
Author notes
option #5 lyric---you can turn off the sun but i'm still gonna shine and i'll tell you why
A contest entry
- The Remedy (I Won't Worry) by Modern Talking.
1200 points, ended October 6, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - It's Poetry Time! =) Musical Inspiration For You! by KyleBerg.
1225 points, ended October 22, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Come One, Come All - The Circus Is In Town by lowercase prelude.
4000 points, ended October 15, 2008, 105 entries
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Comments
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This was just fantastic = truly, utterly, honestly. As Kyle said, there were some in it that were almost like cliches but because you turned them around to suit yourself, you saved them from this title.
Favourite part had to be;
"You kept your chin up but still their words stung
It's hard to have thick skin when you are young
You knew that you were better than those
Who looked down at you from the end of their nose"
Bravo; and best wishes in the contest, although I don't think you need it!
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This poem is marvellous.
This is the exact reason I allowed pre-writes in my contest
And i had no idea that there had been a whole contest on this song!
Now, the poem..
My first impression was of slight intimidation due to the size and presentation of it; i can't help but wonder whether it would be more friendly on first sight if you split it into verses..? Just a suggestion. =)
With that said, I loved the poem once i read it. It is so sneakily uplifting and the rhyme is very clever.
"Turned your blue skies quickly to gray"
-- I've heard phrases about that in so many different places that it would have seemed cliche if you hadn't changed it around to make it your own -- well done with that in particular =)
All in all, a fantastic piece for my contest
Thank you for entering it and allowing me the pleasure of getting to read it, I really appreciate it and wish you all the best in the contest
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and i mean every word of it!!!!
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I cried when I read this poem the second time...I HAD to read it twice! It is a wonderful take on the prompt. Now for the personal comment;
I couldn't get over the strength of the emotions! You are so right; it is hard to have thick skin when you are young. You wrote with such a love, I couldn't hold back. And you ended with a teensy bit of humor (the AP part). It was absolutely genius!
I love you, mom.
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Ooooh Nice One
I really like this for some reason,
Its sounds like it comes from a place of reality.
"You knew that you were better than those
Who looked down at you from the end of their nose"
Very very cool write
Ken
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