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brisk chilly fall wind

brisk chilly fall wind
acorns oak leaves dance leave trees
squirrels scurry by

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  • Arkbear gold member
    September 16, 2008

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    Hello Bill

     

    Comma after *brisk* & * chilly*

     

    I like the movement and imagery..... a tad common in thought, but it has such an innocence about it....thank you so much for entering,

     

    God bless you,

     

    Bear ~


  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    September 16, 2008

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    You have captured Fall in a nutshell so to speak, good solid imagery here. Well Done!

    Dennis


  • KayJay
    September 15, 2008
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    Nicely done. It's tough to find freshness in Fall but you've done really well. Best of luck.
    Ken