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Early Fall Scene

Gold finches flutter
beneath red maple branches,
both changing color. 

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A contest entry

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  • Arkbear gold member
    September 16, 2008

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    Hey Big Guy

     

    Seperate Gold & finches ~

     

    LOVE this Ku'!

     

    There is movement.....imagery.....thought....focus and lovey aha moment....the best yet.....I still have 6 to go

     

    Thank you for entering....God bless you,

     

    Bear ~


  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    September 16, 2008

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    Interesting perspective view of the season and its ongoing changes and how more than the trees are affected. Very nice!

    Dennis


  • KayJay
    September 15, 2008
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    Nice... I love the tie ins drawing to the aha moments... Best of luck.
    Ken


  • Amera gold member
    September 15, 2008

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    Paints a wonderful picture of color and motion. Dificult to do in a 5/7/5 haiku. Well Done!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • suseann
    September 15, 2008
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    Great Haiku with comparisons lively and a smooth read.

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