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Fall Haiku

the heat dissipates
leaves falling from tattered trees
new moon is rising

school is in session
streets emptied of laughing kids
now studying hard

days shorten quickly
the tempo of the world speeds
pumpkins grow in fields

soon it's halloween
costumed children get candy
fall consumes summer

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  • poetrandy
    November 9, 2008

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    Very Good!

    I like these very much! Of, course the last three are Senryu, not strictly Haiku! Well, maybe #3 is a Haiku, too -- but It might be debated!


  • artis
    October 10, 2008
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    simple melodies of autumn played out in a cadence that makes me want to run through the leaves kicking up multi-colored confetti. Lovely write.~~Artis


  • Deathwolf Tasagka
    September 16, 2008

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    Very interesting haiku, again a subject I dont fancy but tend to read every once and awhile. If any work of mine I ever tempted this, was with Tick,Tock,Tack (midnight) But it failed came out as an average poem. But I tried, but anyway, cute and adorable write, very memorable to streets of maine. Great imagery with your haiku dear lass.

    Sincerely,
    Deathwolf Tasagka


  • Arkbear gold member
    September 16, 2008

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    I agree with Dennis....each KU' has a freshness and makes me want to keep reading.....lovely job ~

     

    Perfect count.....and your aha moment is lofty and concludes such a nice chain of Fall Ku's

     

    God bless you and thank you for entering,

     

    Bear ~


  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    September 16, 2008

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    This is a lovely series of haiku, each with fresh vision. Very nice.

    Dennis


  • KayJay
    September 15, 2008

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    Very nice haiku string that captures the season wonderfully... such vividness (except the line about kids studying - pure fiction ). Well done and best of luck.
    Ken


  • DevilHimself silver member
    September 15, 2008

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    this is cool!

    i really like this! it is simple yet eloquent! i find this to be a superior attempt to pass the taste of the season to the reader. i am particularly drawn to the last line and wish there was room somehow for you to add the desolation of winter lurking just out of sight of the reader.
    i rarely comment you know but this deserves kudos indeed!
    -dev


    • Darkwell
      September 15, 2008
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      no my brain can't handle thinking about winter yet it makes me cold even typing it

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