An eye peeking through with ruby red hair
Can he see me does he dare?
Every day I see him peeking through
Will he ever declare his love true?
A heart shaped hole in my fence made by him
Did he make it upon a foolish whim?
Once he wrote a letter and sealed it with gold
To his advances, i'd completely fold
Weak at the knees with a thump thump in my heart
His love has hit, as though cupids dart
I sit and I watch through the hole in the wall
Waiting for my Romeo to finally make his call
A contest entry
- Do What You Do Best by Errant Panther.
450 points, ended September 18, 2008, 12 entries
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Comments
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A question still barely answered throughout time, "how do you make the one you desire, desire you?" great concept, well constructed despite the brevity of the piece.
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Wow what a beautiful write
Wonderful rhyme, the whole poem flowed super well. I enjoyed it very much, good luck in the contest.
LISA
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thank you very much :-) glad you enjoyed it.
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