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Catching Smoke

I see the thin wispy layers
They seek me
I dont want to go there
They are making it hard to breathe
Abducting my precious air
If I could only catch them I would be free
Catch the wispy peices of smoke that is impossible they say
But peace is what I need, for I need these problems to go away
That is why I am trying to catch it
Catch it with my bare hands
For a moment I think I may have a chance
Then with a hand of iron I am forced to the ground
Gasping for even the last vapor of free air
I can't do it the smoke is slipping out of my hands
It is suffucating me
And then I know that the smoke killed me
And I could not beat it even in the end
No, not even in the end.

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  • maktub
    September 29, 2008

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    kinda dark (in a very good way), and emotional...I liked it...the smoke, slipping away...good imagery.


  • The FaeQueen
    September 22, 2008
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    That is so GOOD! My God.... the imagery there is just so creative. I love it!


  • TakenforLife
    September 21, 2008
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    Wow this is a great and dark poem! Awesome Awesome job!


  • alwaysapartofme
    September 17, 2008

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    OMG! wow this is good and well...kinda dark! i didn't know you could write stuff like that! Dang! it was really really awesome! keep up the great writing! wow!