Why is love what people base their life on
All it ever did for me was leave me a mess
So why do people continue build them selves up when they are going to fall
OK sure i may get crushes now and then but why bother???
It's not like they like me anyway
sure i may be young
and yeah i might sound bitter
But whatever
People think i am too young
And say i am too Naive
but i guess it is my fate no matter put it
Each person has their own veiw that is a trait we all possess
They say when i am older i will be less bitter
And i must confess i am lighter hearted than i once was
but that will never change the fact i was hurt by my first love
A contest entry
- listen to your heart... by Mrs. Priester.
300 points, ended September 17, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love - i want it all! by eternitydemon.
332 points, ended September 16, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Darkness and Love, Demons above by AbandonedAngel.
350 points, ended September 19, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - the two hearts... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended November 3, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what did you think?
Comments
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Ah..this is really a touching piece by the poetic muse of the poet..thank you so much for the entry in my contest...
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There's a lot said in this poem!! So sad your first love, hurt so much! You have expressed your feelings really well.
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Hey Kiddo,
Go back through, use capitol letters and periods. Let me know when you do that and I'll come back and help you some more with it.
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good
this is very good. although, not quite what i had in mind. i am sad for you that you had to go through this. i understand the loss of a first love, and being hurt by him...i like it. good luck in the contest.
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