as i open my eyes and i watch the cracks
in the wall
since i can no longer sleep.
dark circles around my eyes.
if i could dream it would be of you.
but i'm too dead inside to even think.
oh to even think.
my pale skin glows
in the darkest of days
only to burn when the sun
rises again.
i stay inside to die and wish
to be reborn again
the newborn
i was born
i feel and i search for you
only to smell your blood
but i run away.
i don't want to hurt you.
the animal that i've become,
so dead and cold,
the anger inside,
the tears i cannot cry,
since i'm not really alive.
i would cry but
i'm dead inside.
A contest entry
- Bite Me... by Dalaney.
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Comments
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"I would cry
but im dead inside"
what a perfect way to end this.
fantastic write. -
I really like this. It reminds me of Edward and his point of view on himself. Thank you for entering and best of luck to you.
Also please put what was asked in the author notes. Thanks.
~Vampy~ -
Vampire poems. Sweet =D
I like this poem. It sounds uncannily realistic, as though you are a vampire yourself. Maybe you are
; D
The language as not overpowering the emotion which was good, it let the things you wanted to express come through clearly.
"i feel and i search for you
only to smell your blood
but i run away.
i don't want to hurt you."
Nice emotional reference here.
Thayou for entering this into my contest.
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Nice
I like it. It reminds me of Edward with Bella. And how much he think he's a monster. I like it. Great job. Good luck -
nice.. ahh dnt you LOVE feelings..but anyway nicely written
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i really liked this alot. great write. is it from edwards pov though??
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from Edward? like Midnight Sun? thats wat it seems to me. great write!
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An intresting write about the Twilight series.. I am a little confused as to who this is about (Edward, Alice etc.).. But none the less. Great write. Thanks for sharing this with us..
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dude i love it it was great.
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what an interesting write. i liked it very much. Thank you for giving me a really good entry. love, lane
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i feel and i search for you
only to smell your blood
but i run away.
i don't want to hurt you.
is this based on twilight?
sounds like edwards point of view
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very good concept, but....it needs some work, as far as grammar and spelling. good job though.
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beautifull write. i love it. it was well written.
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i like it a lot
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