There's magic in them
so potent they are one of a kind.
My wildest parts it makes solemn
whenever they pierce my mind.
Like the stars, they twinkle;
sending peace to every nerve.
Indeed, my fantasies, they tickle;
for happiness is the only thing they serve.
Somehow, they put me in a maze,
one so placid and full of bliss.
Keeping me in a trance of endless praise.
So, a sight of them I pray not to miss.
The beauty within, it shows you possess.
And from it, I know, come no lies.
All these I am forced to confess,
when I look in your eyes.
Author notes
She's got the best eyes i've ever seen.........and in them i see love and all thats beautiful.....love ya Tolani.
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- Rhyming love poetry, the very best. by Joshuavk.
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I love this it's so beautiful!
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Nice poem you've got here =) Hope she read it, and if she has, she must've enjoyed it.
Nice abstract iamgery, but the rhyming could be a little bit better
Cheers, Joshua =)
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Thanks...
thanks a lot for the comment and the critique. as for the rhymes, i'll try to do see what i can do about it. thanks
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this was an enjoyable read, the rhyming was excellent, her eyes must be really beautiful
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thank you very much...i didn't even do justice to the beauty of her eyes. lol
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beautiful
ashewo!...nice one man....applause all d way!
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hey bro.. its great reading your work after such long time.. this such a sincere and honest write.. m sure Tolani is in awww
i liked it very much .. and i am myself an eye admirer.
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