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Chromatic limbo.

Missing image

Tried

to say farewell,

releasing balloons to

let you go...

But I clung on to one

retaining those reveries of you.

 

With you went

the life of spring,

the rainbow coloured summers,

now I sit in that winter

of gunmetal grey

when your frail hand slipped

from mine.

 

Every day

is a chromatic limbo

as I wait for the sun

to break the clouds.

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(photo by Michael Giedrojc)

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  • Dalaney gold member
    September 19, 2008

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    Bittersweet...it is so hard to let go, isn't it? Thank you very much for entering this poem into my contest. I so appreciate it. Love, Lane


  • fallingstarrr
    September 16, 2008

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    You create wonderful images but because of your tone they fail to excite me. This is a great metaphor for how you feel and how the mood strips us of the beauty that exists before us in every moment. Fortunately I was able to wake up and reread each word in connection to the next - and you've done such a beautiful job with creating something really special here.


  • eves shadow
    September 15, 2008
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    Awesome write.
    The sadness is so real.
    Thanks for sharing


  • Wolfdog silver member
    September 15, 2008

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    Superb plus

    A very fine write, indeed. You've expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with
    us.


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    September 15, 2008

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    Heartbreaking yet so beautifully written. So sad for the one left behind. You really capture that feeling with your words. Pam


  • Quiet places
    September 15, 2008

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    Excellent

    Very well expressed! The feelings behind the message is so strong. Very good job of giving your reader something to ponder on. Life is short but each day is longer after one has lost their mate. Great job of writing! Don


  • Cannonsfire
    September 14, 2008
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    Lovely C


  • Pure Thought silver member
    September 14, 2008
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    Beautifully penned Dolores. I like the metaphorical way you presented this.


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    Bittersweet, poetic memories...

    This sad poem really touched my heart, as it brought a tear. And I wondered if this was written about your father or grandfather(?!?) I believe your work is at its zenith - the most sophisticated these days - than I have seen yet, although your writing is always genuine, from the heart, and always masterfully written. This piece is absolutely wonderful Sis, and I thank you for sharing. May God Bless you, and keep you in the sight of His beautiful, loving, angels - as your keepsake balloon continues to light up your life. Slan, Cyn xXx


  • dame de la riviere
    September 14, 2008

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    Fabulous photo, heart-braking poem. The descriptions work well for conveying the desperate sadnesss of this piece. Nice work. Peace , Dannie

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