leaves detatch from trees
colors swirl in final dance~
fall's kaleidoscope
Author notes
Haiku in 5-7-5 format
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XXXV - by Bear by Arkbear.
450 points, ended September 16, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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My favourite!
I love autumn, the way that the colours change in the leaves and new life falls through the changes...
Kaleidoscope is a perfect word for it
Shari
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They do dance!
I can see you love Autumn as well. I just wrote a Haiku about the fall & my leaves were dancing as well. I love this entirely & especially the last line which pulls it all together so nicely:
fall's kaleidoscope!
Bravo for getting the word kaleidoscope into a Haiku!
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An elegant tone to your poem, enjoyed the experience lol
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Very nice ...
I particularly like the final line.
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BEAUTIFUL
you brought fall alive...beautiful colors, fall's kaleidoscope, forever turning leaves...excellent read and lifts the heart softly...niaish my brother
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Hello my Big handsome Brother
*leaves detatch from trees.......not as original as I would like........2nd L is beautiful and has great movement........3rd L is something I have read several times in a Fall KU'....or....a Fall Theme....looking for more....especially, from Your quill
Thank you for entering,
God bless you,
Brother Bear ~
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Simply beautiful. I wish you all the luck, though it appears you won't need it
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Haiku is the best form!
You're a master at this,my friend! Excellent work! Nicely worded "aha!"
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Nice aha... well concieved and written. Best of luck.
Ken
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I really love the word 'kaleidoscope' the way you have used it here! This is such a vivid haiku - beautifully written and magical imagery! It makes me long for autumn - it is my favorite season good luck in the contest!
Keep writing
Polly
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Hoodwink
I like your description. It is a well written haiku. I liked "colors swirl in final dance, fall's kalieoscope". Good luck to you in the contest.
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