Sun disappear
Replaced by morning chills
Breath crystallized
Author notes
Theme: Finally, fall
Fall is such a beautiful season... one of my favorites, along with summer 
A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XXXV - by Bear by Arkbear.
450 points, ended September 16, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please, what do you think ?
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I LOVE FALLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL
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Wonderful
Very creative and so well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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Hello
I see you did not use the Traditional 5-7-5 which was required per say the Rules
Nice KU' though ~
Thank you for entering...God bless you,
Bear ~
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... i thought it was... oh wait, no, i do see now xD i'm sorry ! i'll change that immediately :]
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Ah yes, those crisp autumn mornings, leaves crunch underfoot and your breath hangs in midair like a caption blurb in the comics! Nice imagery!
Dennis
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Nicely done... I like the transition to chill air in the final line... very effective. Best of luck.
Ken
(You might want to recheck the syllable count in line one)
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Fall...
this haiku is so beautiful!!! this is a totally awesome haiku, and I love it!!! thanks so much for sharing, and best of luck in the contest!!! you should do really well!!! keep writing, and have a nice day , -slick99
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