Dead inside
But so alive
A river of tears
That’s not real
Watch me fall
But I go nowhere
Hate the plastic faces
But they’re broken too
We fight the stereotypes
But I fear these clichés make us one
A contest entry
- Joys and Fears - Pay It Forward by Kari.
300 points, ended September 16, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Hello,
I agree that stereotypes seem to be the majority of society today.
The only suggestion I have is that I feel the word but was really overdone in this piece. Perhaps see if you can remove it or replace it with another word.
This was a very sad poem. You did wonderful with releasing your emotions.
Thanks for your entry.
Kari
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This is an intersesting poem. The thought behind it is clear. Best of luck in the contest.
Mike
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