Started raining baby
Please don't stress it
Please just let it
Tumble down
It's only water baby
Please don't panic
Please just let it
Get us wet
Thunders rolling baby
Can you hear it?
Please don't fear it
Let it roar
It's only noise now baby
Listen close now darling
The sound of love departing
Let it go
Lightning splits us baby
Lights up secrets, lies and longings
Illuminates the wrong things
Close your eyes
Wind is howling baby
Blowing my way maybe
Spinning hope and fear all crazy
Whistling goodbyes
Started raining baby
Please don't stress it
Please just let it
Wash us away
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good write baby (LOL just jokin)
but no really, good write. this is a gem. ok now i need to take the kids to the park, they r ready to rip my head off. im hooked on ur writing.
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Terrific poem, well written too, easy to read and powerful.
Well done.
Slayer
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thanks so much
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Fine!
Potent, sad, irrestistable! This is a wonderful poem, so paradoxical... simple and complex! Brilliantly executed! Chesterton would love it, as I do! bravo... bravo...
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Daisygirl...Im so glad to read you again. I missed you something awful. I love this poem, it runs down very fast, very sweet. Sad though, but in a good way.
I sure miss you and Buzbee...how is he?
Okay, love to you, lil sis. I hope things are getting better for you,
Jin
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loved this poem. it was so unique and so wonderfully written. i liek how you are talking to another one, trying to calm them, explain everyhting in the so called storm. the beginning was very good. and also, the ending wrapped it up good, but my favorite stanza would have to be:
Lightning splits us baby
Lights up secrets, lies and longings
Illuminates the wrong things
Close your eyes
it really made the whole poem stand out in my mind. greta job. i love it and i will give you
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