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Prevarication


Nestled deeply within clouds
in the darkest realms of night,
squalid visions begin to break
and evil thoughts take flight.

Let flames engulf brittle souls,
and watch the tricksters fall.
Earth trembles, shakes and cracks
with sudden violent squalls.

Force facts down vile throats
eradicate all vital signs,
septic tongues torn, impaled
to all who try to undermine.

Stigmatism blinded, beyond control,
as sullied lips spit tarnish.
Enhancing truth, fantasy tales,
with sordid whispers they garnish.

Fill open wounds with gangrene,
flow poison through glass veins.
String them up one by one,
until no more liars remain.

 

 

 

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I lost my muse a little here....Those who know me, well you know what this is about

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  • Disturbed Prodigy
    September 17, 2008

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    My friend, i have to say keep it flowing, before the end cause if this is you without your muse, can i borrow her for a time, you are doing killer without her, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • VoltaicHypnosis gold member
    September 16, 2008

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    I don't know what its about, unless its the contest prompt...

    wow this is just amazing. If your muse is on vacation, you got one hell of a back up...

    WELL DONE! I'm so proud of you!!

    Yayayayayay!


  • PastelMoons gold member
    September 15, 2008

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    Excellent !
    revealing--
    'string them up one by one'
    I can't think of a better way

    This is awesome hun!!
    I love it!
    ~Pastel


  • notorious gold member
    September 15, 2008
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    Insincerity with a dose of rhyme!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 15, 2008

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    Hell yeah!!!!! Let flames engulf them!! Mwahahaha!!

    I hate liars who try to bring others down! They get there comeuppance!!!

    Awesome poem hunny!!


  • aboomer silver member
    September 14, 2008

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    I can so relate to the anger that lies beneath these words! I love it all, but especially like the line,

    'flow poison through glass veins.'

    Excellent in emotion, depth and images. best wishes in your contest.


  • vici377
    September 14, 2008

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    wow..for losing your muse..this is fantastic...very dark and very kick ass..perfect flow and rhyme..and your imagery..wow..knocks me over..thanx so much for sharing..and best of luck in the contest..blessings..namaste..


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    Loving the darkness here...

    Impressive!!!
    Bring forth the liars & reveal their transgressions in the cold harsh light of judgement's dawn. Let them writhe & squirm in torment & agony on their bellies like the worms & maggots they are... (Evil laughter!!!)
    Sorry, got carried away there... lol!
    Fantastic rhyme, rhythm & flow (as always)
    Such raw emotion with beautifully layered & justifiable rage throughout...
    Absolutely amazing...
    Well penned, well versed, well done!!!


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    I sure do know what this about.. wOOt!!! you tell it like is Mommy.. I've got a suggestion for you, the same one a friend of mine gave to me.. after the word remain hit enter 3 times. it will look better trust me.

    I can feel the anger through out this poem. actually it jumps right off the page and slaps you...

    I love this poem, so dark which btw I do love so... I love the last stanza so much Mommy..

    good luck in the contest.

    kat

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