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did you know

Did you know each day I see your face?
But now you're gone, without a trace,
I can't go on, I can't survive,
without knowing if you're alive.
My memories of you are blurred,
but flashes come when they are stirred,
Your soft blue eyes, your fine black hair,
the old blue jeans you used to wear.
I know You're hurt, I know you cried,
but I promise you I've never Lied,
when I have said, I miss you so,
why did you think you had to go?
So please come home, I'm begging you,
I know we can start life anew!

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iloveyoualexa is my name, im jonny really and if you wana know anything just ask me

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  • Edited
    January 7
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    when does it end? a well penned piece, relation of emotion is so clesr. well done


  • Chocolate Dime
    September 21, 2008

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    damn jonny, this was sad! awww and like, the rhymes all fit together really really well, and it seemed like it has a lot of emotion in it. alright well, i'll ttyl gator. ciao


  • endless-lover silver member
    September 20, 2008

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    aw doll this was simplye amazing!
    i adored the poem much!

    when I have said, I miss you so,
    why did you think you had to go?


    those two lines hit hard:
    makes me think of a boy and me in the past :/

    the flow and ryme was great not forced at all not long but not to short way to go.

    i wish you the best in the contest much love.

    vanna


  • innocence jaded.xx
    September 20, 2008

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    Wow, this is beautiful. I loved everyyy single word. Your rhyming wasn't forced at all either, which is definitely a plus on your part ! Very VERY well written. Good luck in that contest I love your writing♥


  • Jesann gold member
    September 16, 2008
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    Great poem!!.. you certainly get the feelings across!!


  • Swangrnv gold member
    September 15, 2008

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    Very touching

    Wow, I'm thinking more about this (as it sinks in) and I'm realizing this is certainly a scene I can recall from my past that was eerily similar. well done my man.

  • emma7386
    September 15, 2008

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    'Your soft blue eyes, your fine black hair, the old blue jeans you used to wear.' only true love would remember such details. very well written

  • Care is Dead
    September 14, 2008

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    you miss her alot, dont you? thats how i am with my ex right now... i miss him, and i cant stop thinking about him... your piece is so beautiful... i love the flow.


  • just weak hands
    September 14, 2008

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    Beautifully sad

    D: Your emotions are so clearly seen, that's it's almost painful to read !


    the flow and the rhyme was beautiful :] i love how descriptive you were when you were recalling the memories. The imagery just made the poem that much more beautiful, but also that much more sad !

    thank you so much for entering and best of luck !


  • Sandygram
    September 14, 2008

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    Great Poem!!

    I can feel the sadness in these words. Many readers will be able to relate to them. A delight to read. Best of luck in the contest. Take care. Sandy


  • written-in-ink
    September 14, 2008

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    very nice write but sad at the same time

    man i hae been there before
    this sounds to familiar to me...

    thank you so much for entering and you can bet that I will ask questions lol
    hahahah
    good luck!

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