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The Rest Of Us

On Sundays
the Good People of the isle
are called to church
by beautiful bells

in white towers -

they are devoted

to their pews,
to the man preaching
from the pulpit,
to the hope they will be
redeemed

for one more week

while the Rest Of Us
lie in our beds
hugging pillows hard
just to feel

an echo of heartbeat,
to continue

the dreams of a stranger

doing wicked things
between our legs,
to pray
God will turn off the power
until Tuesday.

 

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  • DolceVito gold member
    October 9, 2008
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    Brava!

    What else can I say?


  • penman gold member
    September 24, 2008
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    Excellent

    Another well expressed poem. So very deserving of the gold. Congratulations.


  • Ken-Maverick
    September 22, 2008

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    ummmm....
    What an interesting read
    I was like...reading, reading then BAM!!!
    the poem just took off in another direction
    Ooooh...you are goood
    Anyways thanks for the entry
    All the best
    Ken

  • Cinnarry gold member
    September 20, 2008
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    a sinning saint, yeah


  • Alyzeh
    September 19, 2008
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    So true, some parts of this poem one can relate to, easily.

    Love it!


  • autarky
    September 17, 2008
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    this made me smile;
    i love it.


  • moonbumps silver member
    September 16, 2008

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    Hey we are only human after all babes-God loves us-each and every one-I love you too!!!
    Hilly xxx


  • sailor ptolema
    September 15, 2008
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    Love it, truly.


    meg

    .


  • nordicsky silver member
    September 15, 2008

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    I’m sure I read somewhere that God loves sinners and poets; so let’s stay under our warm duvets and enjoy our sexy sensual dreams.
    Thanks for posting this,
    Love, Peter


  • tara wilson gold member
    September 15, 2008
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  • A Prophet of 3 gold member
    September 15, 2008

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    awwww ... you forgot the 10:00 AM cigarette and newly opened beer wetting my lips while listening to the "calling bells" of mass ... my favorite time of Sunday


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    September 15, 2008
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    Ahem, you are genius girl. You make me smile everytime I read you. Best to you in the contest


  • Cup-a-Joe
    September 15, 2008

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    Joe


  • Daizee silver member
    September 14, 2008
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    but ohhh so wickedly good....


  • notorious gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    Ooh

    I love anything that mentions god in a non-flattering way--not that this is satirical, but yeah.

    This is so good.

    "Good People of the isle"<--should 'isle' be capitalized? I think it should be...

    "they will be/redeemed/one more week"
    I LOVE that!!
    People are so gullible. Honestly...love these lines--they're insightful, well-written and well...so thoughtful. So you.

    The capitalizations for "Rest of Us" contrasts with "Good People" very nicely.

    "lay in our beds"<--I think that should be 'lie in our beds'.

    The part about the wicked things...
    LMAO!!


    Those last 2 lines--kick-ass cool.



    Jessica

    GOLD I say!!


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 14, 2008

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      you are a cracker jack!
      you found my one grammatical error
      (just seeing if you are on your
      toes) I love you, kiddo.

      Lane


      • notorious gold member
        September 14, 2008
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        Oh, & I forgot to say that 'heartbeat' is one word...unless you meant them separately, in which case you should ignore this entirely.


  • marc creamore
    September 14, 2008

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    Oh Christ Lanie . . . you continously floor me with the wicked and divine images you spread across the tapestry of my mind . . .


  • Sesheta
    September 14, 2008

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    Humor and depth rolled into one. Your are the spice of life in these words, in your poems. I love them to death!


  • Pure Thought silver member
    September 14, 2008

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    I love you words but...

    I love the comments you elicit with them, almost as much. You reach inside others and trip the switch to their emotions. They have no choice, once the poem is read, flip you got 'em.

    Superb as always. You can speak in different voices, but I don't think you can get better.


  • arafura gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    You dream well my friend! I always think it's only the sinners who have to rush off to church on Sunday to beg forgiveness. The "good" people can stay in bed!


  • rhondasail
    September 14, 2008

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    Hahahaha...Sinner or saint?...depends on what the word 'wicked' means...to semi-quote a former President. Wickedly good or wickedly bad?...lol...A terrific write for the contest either way. Peace, Rhonda


  • PerVirtuous
    September 14, 2008

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    As an ordained ROU minister, I invite you to one of our services. A bit unique as we bring them to you. They begin with Sister Sin defacating on your next door neighbor's lawn, followed by a rousing rendition of "Roll me Over in the Clover". Then we take silent nourishment consisting of odd tasting brownies and Ethiopian coffee with healthy amounts of Cognac de Grand Marnier with a touch of whipped cream.

    At this point we sing, "This Old Man" followed by M delivering an extremely brief sermon entirely in languages she does not speak on subjects the rest of us know nothing about. Then we do what is unique to our religion and hold confessional where the minister in the funny hat, yours truly, hears confessions. If they are not good enough to share with the congregation over a drink, we try to spontaneously top them!!! (We don't want to bore our congregation with lame-ass confessions!)

    We finish up by drawing lots, with the loser, usually someone with a funny accent, reading poetry aloud from hitting the "random" button on AP, while the rest of us finish seconds on brownies and spiked coffee then sleep 'till Tuesday.

    A few Sundays of this and you will be a saint.



  • JohnnyD gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    My experiences have taught me that most people, at heart,
    are "Sainners" (Part Sinner, part Saint)

    But, what "is" a Sinner or a Saint? For the truth is I have done many things that some would consider me being a Sinner, but other's would consider me a Saint;

    For the gospel truth is another person's frame of reference can make you either.

    We all make mistakes with our lives,
    some of us even learn from them

    save for me


  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    As always, your writing style is very honest and engaging.

    I'm afraid I'm in the "rest of us" category, too, though I've never felt a church is necessary to commune with the higher power and have always felt a little sorry for people who can only feel Him/Her there.

    Hope you're having a great weekend and a good "lie-in" as my mom would say. I did. It's noon and I just got out of bed and I don't feel guilty about it at all. lol

    M


  • Swangrnv gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    UHM..

    Yeah..well if you ask me anyone might be tempted to sin
    in this uh scenerio! yeah.. good stuff!


  • paulcreates silver member
    September 14, 2008

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    Hmm. Option A sounds pretty good.


    Paul


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    I'm with you, maybe not quite a sinner but certainly no saint

    Love
    Sue


  • Peteskid gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    Ahh, yes pillows...its been a while since I read a good pillow poem......PK


  • BehindTheShadow
    September 14, 2008
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    I am not one of the good people, so I guess I fall in with the rest of us. Wonderfully written!


  • Patpowers silver member
    September 14, 2008

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    Great way with words on this! Nice imagery. I liked what you shared!


  • nevadapoet
    September 14, 2008
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    what a delicious weave of words...with setiments felt by most of us. Perfect, truly.
    Shelly


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 14, 2008
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    Mmhmmm...


  • cricketjeff gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    I' m so pleased that's the way you spend your Sunday mornings!

    Great stuff

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