She is just a wind-up toy,
boxed in by society,
placed upon a pedestal
like some deity.
She’s praised for grace, a pretty face,
but not for what she thinks.
So she’s learned to pose, to smile,
like some silent sphinx.
Deep inside a silent
voice whispers of rebellion.
A spark ignites within her heart;
she’ll be Daddy’s little hellion.
She’ll make choices, not because –
but to simply be against.
She’ll finally find salvation
not in what’s seen, but sensed.
“So much potential” they’ll say
and what waste it seems…
All because, when she was young,
no one listened to her dreams.
Author notes
Prompt: Picture
Picture Credit: http://manips-of-artist2.deviantart.com/art/THE-MACHINE-OF-DREAMS-97370735
No limits
A contest entry
- Pretty Picture Prompt # 19 by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended September 18, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome but I Won't Turn Down Fluffy One's Either :D
Comments
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Wonderful write Ken. This can be so true...it's very sad. You've written the story well.
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Such a sad piece, all children need to dream and have someone hear them. A beautiful poem
Great flow and rhyme to it. Thanks for entering and good luck
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Such a sad yet poignant tale of truth you have penned here!! I think listening to a child's dreams is such an important thing!
Excellent take!
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A view so many rebellious teenagers take.. my children included!
I do love this out of the box piece you have created bringing society into play
Really admire your style
Best wishes
Julie
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SAD!!!
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Amazing.
But as always your poetry is.
I loved the rhyme, the rythm
So perfect within it's own perfection
Simply adorable and often so true
Very beautifully done with this one Ken
Much love & respect to you
Goodluck
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Bravo Ken, excellent write. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem. Good luck in the contest. Katie
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This is a very good write I enjoyed reading!
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Thank you.
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Very well done and to often true. All the best to you in contest.
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Excellent take on the prompt. sad though, if one thinks about it. happens all too often in life these days. ignoring and then wondering why they turned out the way they did. I think this goes along with the statement that I heard a lot when growing up. children are to be seen but not heard.. and then in the end, all it takes is just a little time..
excellent job with your poem ...
good luck in the contest my lover.
kat
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