Yesteryear my love unsullied,
til troubadour began to sing
with silver words of mystery
and like the fool who thought that he,
not heed the abyss at his feet,
as mountain called euphoric scream,
the fool I am began to beg
for love so close I could not see.
Metallic lies steeped agony,
as lofty as the peaks of snow,
ice cold they pierced my suffering heart,
and guilt spewed out, so drowning me.
Of higher love and force are you;
a soul divine embraced my tears,
regret I faltered at your truth,
and welcomed back where I should be.
In a list
A contest entry
- In the rainy days... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended September 23, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Love only a whisper away...
Good morning to you! (in the early afternoon) The sky has brightend enough to see the forest clearly, but it is quiet and tender. Been cleaning up after Hurricane Ike. Hope you are fine. -
really like the way it flows..sometimes we don't see love even it is near us and sometimes we see it wrong.
like those lines:
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and like the fool who thought that he,
not heed the abyss at his feet,
as mountain called euphoric scream,
the fool I am began to beg
for love so close I could not see."
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Beautiful!!! The imagery and depth of feeling in this piece touches the soul. Wonderfully crafted! Thank you for sharing.
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wow......beautiful poet!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
heart-touching!!!!
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a soul divine embraced my tears,
regret I faltered at your truth,
and welcomed back where I should be.
That is just so, so beautiful. Excellent job. It's no wonder why you captured a gold on this piece! Congrats! -
Congratulations on a beautiful Gold ...
for poetic splendor.
Love
Myra
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Indeed a thoughtful immagery bringing the different layers in one visual of poetry..I love it..well done..and my thanks for sharing it...
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beautifull imagery, i couldnt write like that to save my life, spose its just your style tho. deeper than i can grasp but certain parts make me visualise my own hardships i've had lately. for that making me think deep, but still never fully grasping, an amazing write which could be read over and over.
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Brilliant!!!
Best of luck in the contest!!! Peace, cyn
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Good one!
Enjoyed this visual descriptive work of poery here Sarajane! It has a lot of emotion in it! Good luck to you in the contest!!!
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