Im just going to jump in
my words
so few
so rare
so sweet
and all tangled up like string
you should be
able to see
why
my silence is my gift
you make my tongue twist
all to pieces
cant it just be
my echoes of sincerity
the way i hug your chest to me
you know its all that i can manage
my silence is my gift
its all that i can do
with you
reaction is a strange foundation for relationships
cant we just be sure of one thing
my words
so few
so rare
so sweet
and all tangled up like string
are all yours
Author notes
in the snow (or just snow) "you dont see me" #3
A contest entry
- Anti-Gravity Love Song by Xombii.
600 points, ended September 20, 2008, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BATTLE OF THE GOLDS 4 by Swan song.
2500 points, ended October 25, 2008, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Ecxellent and origonal
i love poets who take chances
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I never have heard the song, but im glad you think that i did well. numerous thanks!
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This is beautiful.
If you know the song, this flows well with it, keeping true to parts of the real story.
I can't quote the whole poem, but if I could, I would.
you should be
able to see
why
my silence is my gift
you make my tongue twist
all to pieces
Those are my favourite lines. Thank you so much for entering!
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Wow! Thanks allot!
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wow thats good...
my words
so few
so rare
so sweet
and all tangled up like string
are all yours
thats my fav part...great write and good luck in the contest
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